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Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Requiem » Jan 4th, '09, 02:55

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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '09, 04:59

Shady Babie wrote:Shady: You NEED more emotion and energy in it. For your next track get angry and yell your verse just to see how it comes out. That should put you in the right direction lol. Lyrics were fine.

Ice: Your verse had good flow,. Altogether the verse wasn't amazing but I thought it was pretty good. :y:

The chorus was neat wit you guys trading off. It sounded a little weird in parts but I liked it.

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what if my next track is a love track and its like "I LOVE YOU" and then i scream and then its like absadsdasdasdasasdas

sorry.

Thanks for the feed, ive tried doing that but it just doesnt come out as if i were actually angry, and when it does i dont sound like im rhyming i sound like i got a dildo up my ass.
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby SajN » Jan 4th, '09, 18:10

First verse was wack, sorry.
You lacked everything. So I think you should practise flow, delivery (I have problems there too so no hate lol), and also lyrics. This was boring to listen to.

The second verse had a little bit more emotions but still not enough. The flow was aight, and lyrics were nothing special. But better then 1st verse.

And the hook sounds awful, yeah really.


Just practise and you'll get better :y:
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '09, 19:39

SajN wrote:First verse was wack, sorry.
You lacked everything. So I think you should practise flow, delivery (I have problems there too so no hate lol), and also lyrics. This was boring to listen to.

The second verse had a little bit more emotions but still not enough. The flow was aight, and lyrics were nothing special. But better then 1st verse.

And the hook sounds awful, yeah really.


Just practise and you'll get better :y:

thanks Sajn. Ill try to practice those. I just have a question, since everyone says the hook was horrible was it the lyrics of the hook or would it have slightly worked better if i had better delivery or would it have sounded better without Ice Killa overlaying the last words of the lines? Just wondering ;) Anyways thanks for the honesty :happy:
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby SajN » Jan 4th, '09, 19:52

Imo, the lyrics works, but the performance of the hook wasnt good. I think it would be better if you had kinda scream-rapped it, if you know what I mean. With a dark voice it would work.
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Jan 4th, '09, 19:53

SajN wrote:Imo, the lyrics works, but the performance of the hook wasnt good. I think it would be better if you had kinda scream-rapped it, if you know what I mean. With a dark voice it would work.

Oh alright, ill keep that in mind for when i re-do this track ;)
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Tash8 » Jan 5th, '09, 00:13

you should work on your lyrics, it's impossible to make them sound good.
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Jan 5th, '09, 01:37

Tash8 wrote:you should work on your lyrics, it's impossible to make them sound good.

Well im trying to get better with witty punches, i just cant.
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Jay-19 » Jan 5th, '09, 12:34

Epiphany, you kinda sound like Stephen Hawkings when you rap. :confusion:
Anyway, it's not too bad really. Just need to get better delivery.
Flow is pretty decent, maybe a little off at times.

Ice Killa, you had good flow on this man.
But the rhymes isn't anything special actually. Simple rhymes.
Voice is cool, I really like it!

Mixing isn't good, but not the worst either.
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Jan 5th, '09, 22:06

KillahGoat wrote:Epiphany, you kinda sound like Stephen Hawkings when you rap. :confusion:
Anyway, it's not too bad really. Just need to get better delivery.
Flow is pretty decent, maybe a little off at times.

Ice Killa, you had good flow on this man.
But the rhymes isn't anything special actually. Simple rhymes.
Voice is cool, I really like it!

Mixing isn't good, but not the worst either.

Hahahaha, i lol'd @ the steve hawkings thing. Thanks for the feed man :happy:
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Re: Epiphany - Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Requiem » Jan 5th, '09, 23:39

^thx killah goat :) glad u thought i had good flow. lmao @ simple rhymes thing, sometimes simple is best :happy:
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