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Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 6th, '09, 03:15

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KtCFVyMMbhY

Tell me what you think.

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Expect the destruction of time bomb letters and words
the flames burn, your hooked like worms, spit with stern verbs
I drop waves with a really powerful flow like titanic rotors
the schematics show words tied together with dynamic sulfur
the combustion explodes, jaw implodes, so I suppose
the flames will glow my face from the hole under my nose
I wondered and chose, now the result of my choice was here
the noise you hear is meant to touch the brain's hemispheres
the end is near, lyrical Armageddon, the real verses the fake
all the curses they take begin to start the murder at stake
time to awake, grab your lethal microphones, it's time to battle
my rhymes dismantle weak mandibles, and slaughter the cattle
I ride flows like saddles, with a hawks eye on my gridiron like Seattle

(Demon possessed laugh)

How excellent, this text is meant to burn wack MC excrement's
Now, next the scent is pulverized when the deadly voodoo hex is sent
who's next to vent?, I spent many days formulating and thinking
the blood of virgins I'm drinking, the mind of psycho's I'm speaking
grasp on weakling, the strong hand of power will devour and shower
your hours in blood, and with a dud you'll hear the ballistic bullet fire
insanity is an understatement, I begin to plan my replacements
in a basement, my mind encasement is trying my patience
rhyming with a flow that's ancient, with a chemical algorithm
the rhythm is superstition until the verbal bullets hit em
mental blocks, gentle locks, sentimental shots, a detrimental glock
elemental shocks, instrumentals knock, all from these fundamental spots

As I walk through my memories.....all I see is a barren sight covered in bloody footprints, and every step I take forward...I get pushed back. I see the light, but it's only temporary....light always dims away...

Before fools used pro tools my flow moved in the genome of whole grooves
my soul moved, my genes proved to be godlike and unable to remove
rhythm improved, and soon the elements of darkness delivered chaos
for a day off I have to slay soft MC's or else my need will be turned off
walkin' with a heavy cough, sickness to much for the body systems
a victim of false predictions and those who didn't bother to listen
the father of dissin lies in the chest cavity, it's everyone's heart
we all have inner Napoleon Bonaparte, we all can take over our art
from the start of mankind I was alive teaching cavemen how to write
and when I told them not to play with this fire, they did it out of spite

And as the blood stained footprints of my bleeding soul sketches the trail of agony, I look behind me with a sentimental grin. For I know these past and future tribulations are only temporary, and the sanctuary of death will be my guilty pleasure. A worthless existence is as painful as death itself
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 6th, '09, 09:48

i'm a gonna give a feed once i finished ..
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 6th, '09, 10:17

will mc .. i think da rhymes pattern and lyrics are dope as usual . nothing to comment over this cuz they sick nd dope nothhin more ,, but man the beat was too much annoying for me .. actually it ruined your voice ,, cuz your voice sounds rough over it . your flow is good , delivery too , it was good , but how to about to change your tone into this song , i dunno for me it's wicked more if your voice was more tender or gently , so gd job over here.. good track though .. :y:
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 6th, '09, 21:09

z_em wrote:will mc .. i think da rhymes pattern and lyrics are dope as usual . nothing to comment over this cuz they sick nd dope nothhin more ,, but man the beat was too much annoying for me .. actually it ruined your voice ,, cuz your voice sounds rough over it . your flow is good , delivery too , it was good , but how to about to change your tone into this song , i dunno for me it's wicked more if your voice was more tender or gently , so gd job over here.. good track though .. :y:

thanks bro :y:
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby Requiem » Jan 7th, '09, 00:07

I hate the beat too. lmao, ur voice is sooo evil sounding. LMAO, demon posses u? :unsure:
i liked the verses, thought u could've slowed ur flow a little in verse 1. 2nd verse was slower, and sicker.
3rd verse no complaints, good job man

overall 8/10, good track. beat's bad, mixing is good, i look forward to more :8)
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 7th, '09, 16:19

IceKilla wrote:I hate the beat too. lmao, ur voice is sooo evil sounding. LMAO, demon posses u? :unsure:
i liked the verses, thought u could've slowed ur flow a little in verse 1. 2nd verse was slower, and sicker.
3rd verse no complaints, good job man

overall 8/10, good track. beat's bad, mixing is good, i look forward to more :8)

Thanks bro! More coming soon.... :y:
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jan 7th, '09, 16:27

ur quality should be fixed...hey do u mind sending me a raw pella so i can mix it ...just for the fuck of it....maybe to see where u went wrong :whistle:
its could be a decent song but just ur quality is a huge no go...especially ur emotions are are too much...lol
as i said..u headin in the right direction...
flow was shaky again...but u get better step by step...squirrel steps :y:
peace..hit me up wit a pella :y:
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 7th, '09, 16:33

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:ur quality should be fixed...hey do u mind sending me a raw pella so i can mix it ...just for the fuck of it....maybe to see where u went wrong :whistle:
its could be a decent song but just ur quality is a huge no go...especially ur emotions are are too much...lol
as i said..u headin in the right direction...
flow was shaky again...but u get better step by step...squirrel steps :y:
peace..hit me up wit a pella :y:

K dude, thanks for the feed.
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby <Stiiccy> » Jan 19th, '09, 03:24

i like this song...i think the quality could be better with better mixing...but that will come,,,and i think your emotions are just fine man...good job :y:
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby B.A.D. » Jan 19th, '09, 04:06

oh is the same beat me, profaz and chris used for apokalypse

I like your delivery haha, angry as fuck lmao

the flow needs to be fixed as well as the quality, lyrics are fire but you need to position em in another structure, other than that, great track, great concept :y:
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Re: Psycho From Alcatraz

Postby randomghost » Jan 19th, '09, 11:57

mm....nice beat :y: :y: ....lyrics are good..flow is not on point....vocals are too loud....ma fav. is verse 2...u need to work more bro on flow and try next time to make the vocals not too loud...lookin forward to hear more :happy:
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