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you akkin like you dun know feat marvelous

Postby enjinn » Jan 17th, '09, 00:26

this is a pretty old track i found and never posted here...i like to think ive improved since then :whistle: i go first and marvelous is second and on the hook... http://www.zshare.net/audio/542428284648ee35/

lyrics to my verse:
yo theres passion when im rapping and i listen to beats
my brain is ancient im awake and you still live in this dream
i spit the disease, white flags wishing for peace
i dont battle if i had to i could rip you with ease
deliver the heat, you never saw me but you heard me though
im merking foes, im vicious with the lyrics and a perfect flow
jealous bitches always like when i bleed
but they cant deny the fact that im nice on the beat
you not legal girl i like what i see
if your pussy dont grow hair babygirl can spend the night with this g
sike...chotic im off topic again
what was the topic i forgot it yo im sorry my friend
oh, marv and cali yeah we dropping the rawest
i went to hide the body but forgot where the corpse is
yo i left for a while im still the rapist though
stay complex with the rhyme but use a basic flow
what you hating fo, cuz you not sick enough
i give a fuck, if you not feeling this so lick my dick and nuts
you a bitch and you fucking with a animal
you nothing i can handle you, you fronting so im asking you
each one teaches one
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Re: you akkin like you dun know feat marvelous

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jan 17th, '09, 00:33

ur delievery is nice man...pronouncation lacks in some spots...flow is shaky aswell
marv's flow is stable....pronouncation and delievery is very good aswell.....

i liked your energy....flow could be more smooth-er....work on your flow and pronouncation :y:
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Re: you akkin like you dun know feat marvelous

Postby randomghost » Jan 17th, '09, 13:00

mm...nice delivery...flow need to be more prepared...nice lyrics....hook is ok....marvelous lyrics are good...voice needs more power and more energy....good shit though...keep it up :happy:
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Re: you akkin like you dun know feat marvelous

Postby enjinn » Jan 17th, '09, 21:46

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:ur delievery is nice man...pronouncation lacks in some spots...flow is shaky aswell
marv's flow is stable....pronouncation and delievery is very good aswell.....

i liked your energy....flow could be more smooth-er....work on your flow and pronouncation :y:
randomghost wrote:mm...nice delivery...flow need to be more prepared...nice lyrics....hook is ok....marvelous lyrics are good...voice needs more power and more energy....good shit though...keep it up :happy:


thanks for listening
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Re: you akkin like you dun know feat marvelous

Postby enjinn » Jan 17th, '09, 21:46

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:ur delievery is nice man...pronouncation lacks in some spots...flow is shaky aswell
marv's flow is stable....pronouncation and delievery is very good aswell.....

i liked your energy....flow could be more smooth-er....work on your flow and pronouncation :y:
randomghost wrote:mm...nice delivery...flow need to be more prepared...nice lyrics....hook is ok....marvelous lyrics are good...voice needs more power and more energy....good shit though...keep it up :happy:


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