video of me attempting to rap

[dadragonfool]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DpYZg31QVpU

yeah not that great, but comment it atleast?

talk all the crap you want, it really doesnt bother me that much...

[gladimnotsoluble]

Need enunciation. and definitely need a beat.

[Ka0t1c]

wtf is this, are these ur rhymes or someone elses you're reading?

[James R.]

Well I'm pretty sure those were your original lyrics and they were pretty whack to be honest. Your flow was weird as hell. Your delivery damn near put me to sleep. You need to enunciate your words better or maybe just speak a little louder so I can actually hear you. I'd suggest getting on a beat or something. There's tons of them on youtube that people have made. Try to rip those shits up or smtn.

[dadragonfool]

i cant have any beats, no sound on computer

and what does enunciate mean... i dont go to school

[Ka0t1c]

when you speak, sound out the words completely instead of mumbling/slurring

[gladimnotsoluble]

i cant have any beats, no sound on computer

and what does enunciate mean... i dont go to school

Go to school.

[dadragonfool]

ohh, so enunciate, is what fifty cent DOESNT do?

and eff school, i got in trouble first day, so ima just attempt to get GED next month when i turn 16

[Cwayon_Murder]

It's so monotone and hilarious.