Epiphany - The World (Rough Version)

[Solace]

Reason why it's the rough version is because I'll re-record my verse (cause i messed up flow in an area and I'd like to try to improve my delivery). It may sound like flow is off the entire time but Ice Killa mixed the verse in too late, like 1 second late. So when I re-record it, itll be mixed (Hopefully) in the correct area.

Lyrics:
Vendettas, vices, a fight is just aggression,
Physically masked, causing kids to get arrested,
Violence, murders, influenced by the media,
More deaths than the count of words in encyclopedias,
Mothers crying, fathers leaving, people dying for no reason,
Every Spring, Summer, Fall and Winter, every season,
Kids bleeding, psychos raping, real life is ruthless,
Things get out of hands, from smacking to shooting,
The genesis of war, started with simple arguments,
Can lead on so far, it just destroys my confidence,
Most spirits wish to live, but living just wish to die,
They live to die, many just living a lie,
See right through their eyes, translucent happiness,
Cold hearts overshadow bliss, what kind of crap is this,
I just sit down, relax and watch this world burn down,
Reminisce, just think of the shit you just learned now.

Download Link: http://www.zshare.net/audio/55076409ba24b6d3/

[gutawafang]

I've listened to this man. I think it's too short, how bout making another verse?

And this is my first time hearing your voice. Good vocals. Yes I agree with ya. Rerecord. This is cool shit man. And i like the effects you used to drown your voice. Makes me darker.

[Requiem]

^i already gave u my feed on msn. but i liked it man

[Solace]

I've listened to this man. I think it's too short, how bout making another verse?

And this is my first time hearing your voice. Good vocals. Yes I agree with ya. Rerecord. This is cool shit man. And i like the effects you used to drown your voice. Makes me darker.

Yeah it is pretty short, and i am gladdd you checked it out. It's just one of those practice tracks, when it's re-recorded and mastered then that will be on my mixtape. Im glad you liked it, its not much but still glad that you liked.

@Ice Killa, thanks

[Slim Zaddy]

well , actually it's a good practice .. the beat and the effects used are pretty nice. lyrics were there and rhymes were good too .. you seems to flow good in it .. delivery at some points is off , you know ,, but then you retain it back.. you had a good voice too ,, keep do practicing shadymademe ,, soory but i know you by this name lol,, anyway ,, gd job here homie

[Robbie G]

Lyrics and beat were really nice.

Your flow seemed decent enough to me but to be honest it was boring. For me there just wasn't enough energy in your voice.

Still, your getting better.

[Speech]

well the lyrics were tight!...flow wasn boring but nothing special i guess it's the lack of delivery that pulls it down...idk what your using to record but it sounds like cell-phone work xD
get at least a 70 $ mic or something and your way better to go...as i said lyrics were tight...just step up the delivery
6 / 10
couln enjoy it that much but i see you have potential
peace

[Solace]

well , actually it's a good practice .. the beat and the effects used are pretty nice. lyrics were there and rhymes were good too .. you seems to flow good in it .. delivery at some points is off , you know ,, but then you retain it back.. you had a good voice too ,, keep do practicing shadymademe ,, soory but i know you by this name lol,, anyway ,, gd job here homie

Haha i dont mind if people call me by shadymademe Thanks man for checking it and leaving detailled feed, z_em.

Lyrics and beat were really nice.

Your flow seemed decent enough to me but to be honest it was boring. For me there just wasn't enough energy in your voice.

Still, your getting better.

Thanks dude, ill keep trying to improve.

well the lyrics were tight!...flow wasn boring but nothing special i guess it's the lack of delivery that pulls it down...idk what your using to record but it sounds like cell-phone work xD
get at least a 70 $ mic or something and your way better to go...as i said lyrics were tight...just step up the delivery
6 / 10
couln enjoy it that much but i see you have potential
peace

Haha thanks man, im using a camera to record haa Glad you liked the lyrics and shit, ill keep trying to improve the delivery.

I appreciate it people for checking it out, really do guys!

[Solace]

Damn I just found this

Lyrics - Lyrics were great as usually. So not much to say, I did like the theme of the track.

Quality - Good enough for me lol But I'm not a quality whore like most

Flow - It sounded good, nothing groundbreaking. I thought it was on beat

Delivery - Oh the horrible delivery speech. I actually think the monotone voice went well here. But on other tracks you might need to improve. how? idk, I'm still trying to find out how

But it was a good track. You fucking keep surprising me with this good shit. To be honest, I'm sick of it. Either be a horrible rapper or get the fuck out. lol

Good track

I feel like im being dickridden cause its not as good as any other track on this site and you still liked it!

Thanks dude for feeding, i appreciate it. And whenever you figure out ways to improve delivery you better fucking PM me it

[Robbie G]

Shady Babie > Epiphany > Sticcy, Sajjad, & Steve Spag lol

Corrected.

[Solace]

Shady Babie > Epiphany > Sticcy, Sajjad, & Steve Spag lol

Corrected.

Well if that's the correction I wouldn't be surprised if I heard you dropped out.

[Requiem]

Shady Babie > Epiphany > Sticcy, Sajjad, & Steve Spag lol

Corrected.

Well if that's the correction I wouldn't be surprised if I heard you dropped out.