EGOTISTICAL

[Purple23Haze]

Lookin’ at Nas makes me think of this dude pause
Joshua comin thru dude was a douche thought he was the truth
Kinda like the pharaoh but I aint scarred yo
I’m D-O-G reversed backwards G-O-D creed holds me
“GOD?!” God replies “yea!” hears nothing. God thinks “oh man, can’t hear.”
God figures, thus says “I AM” this is who I be, true eyes hold me
Through you I speak truth I seek holding betrayal
I must be into the true eyes I failed but
Common alliance consciousness and thee environment vibrant
You can’t exchange for the sirens singing they song tyrants
The giant combined in it rhyme spinach I’m finished

[gutawafang]

If this is a rhyme, only

Common alliance consciousness and thee environment vibrant
You can’t exchange for the sirens singing they song tyrants

rocks the shit out of me. The rest seems like out of flow...

[Purple23Haze]

thanx man

[Rain Matrix]

this was definitly creative but I'm not sure what else to say

[Solace]

Structure is bad, and even if you fixed it the lines are way too short. Bad piece imo, but keep at it dude

[Purple23Haze]

Epiph, I aint tryin to diss dude but structure aint flow and flow aint structure. You can't expect even with the tightest structure and flow in writing to have make it worth reading if you just can't get it. I could put this on audio and it would make a flow not forced but flow because of emphasis and feeling basically what I'm tryin to say is pay attention to the words the meaning and the rhymes not so much that if it flows for you, cause you know you can make anything flow!

Your trippin if you don't think my punchlines are dope
my rhymes and my feeling in the same boat
I spit shit you aint never seen before

[Xray]

"I’m D-O-G reversed backwards G-O-D"

I've heard that before, good to see people still jacking lyrics.

[Solace]

Epiph, I aint tryin to diss dude but structure aint flow and flow aint structure. You can't expect even with the tightest structure and flow in writing to have make it worth reading if you just can't get it. I could put this on audio and it would make a flow not forced but flow because of emphasis and feeling basically what I'm tryin to say is pay attention to the words the meaning and the rhymes not so much that if it flows for you, cause you know you can make anything flow!

Your trippin if you don't think my punchlines are dope
my rhymes and my feeling in the same boat
I spit shit you aint never seen before

I didnt even mention flow And no you cant make anything flow, eg:

My lyrics are dope/
But your lyrics suck like a hooker on a friday night but for me on friday night i just sit playing video games like Halo with a tasty Coke/

And okay you want me to comment on what your saying well i cant understand what you meant in this piece. What I get from it is that you're trying to fix a corrupted life, is that right?

"I’m D-O-G reversed backwards G-O-D"

I've heard that before, good to see people still jacking lyrics.

loll

[Purple23Haze]

"I’m D-O-G reversed backwards G-O-D"

I've heard that before, good to see people still jacking lyrics.

Well I guarantee you that thats an original by yours, truly good to see people are still jacking my lyrics

I'm the only one you know who truly believes hes god so why would anyone else say that

and epiph I made your line rhyme and I'll prove it by doing an audio rappers do it all the time

[Solace]

"I’m D-O-G reversed backwards G-O-D"

I've heard that before, good to see people still jacking lyrics.

Well I guarantee you that thats an original by yours, truly good to see people are still jacking my lyrics

I'm the only one you know who truly believes hes god so why would anyone else say that

and epiph I made your line rhyme and I'll prove it by doing an audio rappers do it all the time

i doubt anyone would jack your lyrics especially considering hes heard the line before youve posted it and who would jack a crap line? And who do you believe is god O_O Anyways yeah id love to hear you flow that.

[Purple23Haze]

i doubt anyone would jack your lyrics especially considering hes heard the line before

I've been posting that line for years at least four

[Solace]

i doubt anyone would jack your lyrics especially considering hes heard the line before

I've been posting that line for years at least four

why the hell would you recycle that shit?

[Purple23Haze]

i doubt anyone would jack your lyrics especially considering hes heard the line before

I've been posting that line for years at least four

why the hell would you recycle that shit?

something I believe in

[Xray]

Jack your jacked line? haha nah man yours is already jacked, if I ever wanted to jack a line, believe that you won't even know.

EDIT: but for real dude, whether you jack lines or whatever you do that's none of my business, I just said what I know so no hate.

[Purple23Haze]

Jack your jacked line? haha nah man yours is already jacked, if I ever wanted to jack a line, believe that you won't even know.

EDIT: but for real dude, whether you jack lines or whatever you do that's none of my business, I just said what I know so no hate.

I don't know man you could be one of my favorite rappers and then I may have a chance of knowing

It's all good none hate