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Re: Smack A Model

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 11th, '09, 05:20

Chet Starr wrote:thanks alot for the reviews guys :worship:

James & fish & Shady: sorry for the bad quality, but don't start skipping my tracks, cause this is the last time I rap over the phone lol, but thanks for feeding the track :worship:


Thanks sticcy, I can promise that I'm gonna work on that :y:

Just want people to know, that I am one of the rappers here who will listen to the feed & actually work on the problems that are pointed out :smoking:

chet...why can't you just pick up the gutiar and be a punk singer...dude your the next Tom Delonge..
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 11th, '09, 05:27

Chet Starr wrote:^^^ I'm gonna buy one no doubt man, then I'll post the first rock album in the audio section ever lol

Just wish I had my old guitar & bass :(

i wanna be on it so i can do sreamo hooks
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Requiem » Feb 11th, '09, 05:33

^ thx james for the feed. i do need to work on my delivery, which gets hard on long ass verses. lmao at the emotion thing. yup, believe it or not i almost passed out after that verse for getting to angry with it. cuz my face turned red, i lost my breath, and i fell on the floor. so i guess i put too much emotion into it, it's cuz my voice is soo damn high pitched. i can never sound pissed off :sweating: appreciate the honesty homezzz :smoking:

@ sticcy, if i copied u, then i'd be sticcy jr. :p
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 11th, '09, 05:37

@ sticcy, if i copied u, then i'd be sticcy jr.

I don't see that as a bad thing..cmon everone LOVES me...don't you wanna join the party :shifty:
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Requiem » Feb 11th, '09, 05:39

XXStiiCCyXX wrote:
@ sticcy, if i copied u, then i'd be sticcy jr.

I don't see that as a bad thing..cmon everone LOVES me...don't you wanna join the party :shifty:

if it gets me some :flower:
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 11th, '09, 05:40

Ice Killa wrote:
XXStiiCCyXX wrote:
@ sticcy, if i copied u, then i'd be sticcy jr.

I don't see that as a bad thing..cmon everone LOVES me...don't you wanna join the party :shifty:

if it gets me some :flower:

oh of course it will
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Requiem » Feb 11th, '09, 05:41

where do i sign up? i've been 40 yr old virgin for too long :p
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby <Stiiccy> » Feb 11th, '09, 05:43

Ice Killa wrote:where do i sign up? i've been 40 yr old virgin for too long :p

ok...first download grunge rapz...listen to it 2 times..then go smoke a joint with a terrorist , then donkey punch his wife ...then go tell james this exact message "The white code is in the hose"
then get back on tr and tell me how everything went...and will go from there
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby James R. » Feb 11th, '09, 05:51

Chet Starr wrote:James & fish & Shady: sorry for the bad quality, but don't start skipping my tracks, cause this is the last time I rap over the phone lol, but thanks for feeding the track :worship:

Naw man I wouldn't skip. I really wanna feed your verse, I just can't hear it lol. I'll be checkin for you
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby dbeauluvswomen » Feb 11th, '09, 07:20

The intro is funny with all the zero's
the hook isn't bad. I like how you changed the words up, but its put together badly and off beat at times. Killa's verse was pretty good. I actually like this verse more than most of the verses you recorded for the album. Lyrics were okay, the way you rapped your verse was good..sometimes, lol. As far as the emotion goes..I think you're trying too hard, but I won't bug with that..sticcy said enough. Ha, Chet was cool. Lyrics were decent .gotta give it up to you for spittin over a phone. MC A I thought came the best, except the end when I couldn't understand the words. Track was alright.
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Tornado » Feb 11th, '09, 15:51

Ok, it's not great but I don't know whether you guys were doing a parody or really trrying in this song.
Ice Killa, you sound like your just rapping for the first time ever, the intro was the best part of the song, the chorus started well but went offbeat horribly.

1st Verse- The lyrics are random and didn't make sense, you were actually on time for the most part but your delievery is lacking punch and conviction. You should add a second layer to your verse and add ad-libs on it. Your voice still is weird to me but it'll change over time but it does sound nerdy

2nd Verse- Woah Mobie Phone Quality (remembers those times)...hopefull you get a better mic soon. That "Tone" verse is great and you had ok lyrics jusy bad lyrics

3rd Verse- Anon, you got potnential, the best out the 3 by far, but track don't suit you, and also sounds your shouting too much, learn to control your voice a bit and you can use stabs and ad-libs and additional layers to bring extar presence but i actually enjoyed your part
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Requiem » Feb 11th, '09, 22:39

@ Dbeau and Tornade, :worship: thx for the feed. i apreciate it, and lmao, no of course we weren't doing this seriously. we just decided it would be cool because we had the instrumental :y:
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Solace » Feb 11th, '09, 22:43

You got my feed on this, i didnt really notice the change from your TAKE 2 chorus and this finalized one. Seems the same. The verses were all okay, nothing like OH SHIT I WANNA HEAR THAT AGAIN, delivery is improving. Not much else I can say, if Chet had his mic with the improved qual this track would have been a lot better. Something fun to chill to :y: This is up with Not What It Used To Be (Feat. Alysha)
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby Requiem » Feb 11th, '09, 22:45

Epiphany wrote:You got my feed on this, i didnt really notice the change from your TAKE 2 chorus and this finalized one. Seems the same. The verses were all okay, nothing like OH SHIT I WANNA HEAR THAT AGAIN, delivery is improving. Not much else I can say, if Chet had his mic with the improved qual this track would have been a lot better. Something fun to chill to :y: This is up with Not What It Used To Be (Feat. Alysha)

thx man. yea, i already got ur feed. lmao, i'm a loooong way from being great. buy i'm getting there. no one said the road to illness was a short one. unless u like infect urself :confusion:
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Re: Smack A Model

Postby slimsoxshady » Feb 12th, '09, 01:32

verses were pretty solid with the lyrics and flow...but the hook was absolutely terrible, u might wanna re-record the hook, other then that its a good drop
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