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The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 13th, '09, 02:58

Track- The R3bel Storm Preview
Artist- Rain Matrix
Album- I lace beats
File Type- Mp3
Link - The R3bel Storm Preview.mp3 - 1.34MB

my first song with a "higher" quality sound... tell me what you all think
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Urban Punk » Feb 13th, '09, 15:29

Truthfully I think your verse sounds very rushed, my advice to you would be slow it down a little take your time when crafting your lyrics over the beat and go over them till you remember them before recording... when I first started I had the same problem though I think overall if you fixed that you’d be a lot better
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby enjinn » Feb 14th, '09, 09:18

your flow was on and off...not off beat...just not with rythem...but all in all you came nice...its a nice track
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Xray » Feb 14th, '09, 11:07

Do you even give a fuck about flow? cause that was straight up OFF FLOW like seriously, your bars are like a fucken book, shorten them if you wanna flow. Your starting to sound like that other dude that drops tracks on tr, forgot his name hmmm. To be honest these lyrics don't suit you at all, cause I'd like to hear this from a dude with crazy flow and energetic delivery, yet your off flow by a mile, and don't seem to have a good delivery. So I don't know man this track is weird.
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Robbie G » Feb 14th, '09, 14:34

Your getting better man, just keep dropping. Flow goes on and off but mostly off, I'd take sajjads advice of shorter lines. Your better off with simpler lyrics until you get your flow down. :y:
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 14th, '09, 15:18

thanks for all the feed
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby B.A.D. » Feb 14th, '09, 23:08

"Higher Quality"????

hahaha, wtf is this??, you should keep to the writing man untill you learn how to set up a structure and until you learn how to flow :n:
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby slimsoxshady » Feb 15th, '09, 01:43

try to structure ur bars with roughly the same amount of syllables...cuz right now, there really isn't much flow despite having quality rhymes, which really takes away from the listening experience...also ur vocals are too "out there", so maybe use EQ and bring em back a lil...i'd suggest lowering about -2.0 at 3,500 Hz and -2.0 at 12,000 Hz...also try adding some reverb, i'm a big fan of having a slight reverb
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Nu Syd » Feb 16th, '09, 02:07

flow is way off, to quick, get your flow straight first or else nothing will compliment your lyrics.
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby gutawafang » Feb 16th, '09, 02:13

Your voice's too loud. And yeah, I also think you didn't follow the beat. Lyrics, not bad.

7.5/10. Good beat. And I like the title! :y:
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby neversnooze » Feb 16th, '09, 03:58

the beat is good...... but like xray and big ax d said you are off flow and delivery was not there. im no artist but try to listen and flow with the beat.

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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 16th, '09, 06:15

I'm working on it day and night... hopefully my audio tourney drop will be better
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Re: The R3bel Storm Preview

Postby mcZu » Feb 16th, '09, 13:17

Don't know what to add, eveyrhting has already been said. You really need to work on your flow bro, that was really OFF, your lyrics are good though but you need to craft them around the beat. Your forcing the delivery and are way of rythme. Try to feel the beat and go with it. Don't know what to say else, quality aint that impressive. If you learn how to flow your lyrics they will have a better impact.
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