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Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

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Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

Postby enjinn » Feb 15th, '09, 10:20

i did two verses on two beats...i really appreciated the support i get here...yall have helped me a lot...feedback is much appreciated and will be returned... http://www.zshare.net/audio/55650086bb7ed00a/
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Re: Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

Postby Xray » Feb 15th, '09, 12:53

First beat and verse is pretty cool, I liked the beat alot, kinda sounds familiar for some reason. Flow couldn't be anymore basic, and the structure of the verse is messed up IMO. Made the track feel empty cause you take more breaks than your supposed to. Delivery & emotion was good though, but the way you mix your acapellas isn't. Cause your voice is really deep, and with dry mixing it ruins the outcome of a track. Next time make your acapella more wet, trust me it'll sound much better, and your voice is very loud for the beat to.

Can't be bothered feeding the other half of the song though, but it sounded good :whistle: lol.
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Re: Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

Postby B.A.D. » Feb 15th, '09, 19:17

basically same as sajjad said, and the same I said on your other track about the quality, voice etc..

nice way to bend the two beats I like that, as soon as you fix the quality problems its time for starting your own EP, so holla at me if you need help wid it

nice tracks or track hahaha,

another recomendation, post the lyrics so we can get the 100% of the words, other than that great track and gret emotion, keep it up man :y:
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Re: Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 15th, '09, 19:29

this is da 1st time i feed ya .. but gotta admit ,, it's sick .. i like the mixing thing ,, beats are pretty sick ., you have a control on your voice .. flow was there ,, delivery is sick , so you got all these,, lyrics was too good,, gd job here bro .. keep it up ..
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Re: Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

Postby Jay-19 » Feb 15th, '09, 19:43

Well, as Sajjad said, your voice is a bit too loud for the beat.
Other than that, I really like this man. Matter of fact, I've liked everything I've heard form you man.
Love the dark voice and the lyrics on this track.

The second part is better in my opinion. You kept a better flow on that part.
Lyrics were tight there too.

So overall, really good job man! :y:
Just that the first part could be mixed better.
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Re: Sins OF The Savior (all feedback will be returned)

Postby enjinn » Feb 21st, '09, 09:09

thanks sooo much for the feedback!!!
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