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My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 7th, '09, 02:08

http://www.zshare.net/audio/5664318876f4e0d1/ <--- song

Lyrics:
enfused within the doorways of dismemberment
sitting, boiling, burn in this temperment
angry, looking outside from the inside
my insides burn, I walk yet my skin rides
doorways passing, flashing light in my eyes
memories are just my inner fight in disguise
if I talk my words are blinded by the sun
If I think my thoughts are winded and is spun
I can't take it, this life, this world is gone
I'm being played, my life is a worthless pawn
I close my eyes, yet this world is still the same
bloodstained rain in my brain feels the pain
my passion is overruled by the fasion of death
drinking covers the pain, but the lashes is left
my reflection reflects the image of insanity
and once it's gone this will be the end of me

This life burns as I walk the hallways of death
continue to walk, even if I loose my breath
trial and tribulations, pain is deep inside
a life alone is better then a life of lies

I live, yet someone inside told me I died
I look at her, she's taken, I felt my eyes cry
it's OK though, melodies keep me at peace
I really like you though, talk to me atleast?
I look strange, I think things I shouldn't think
the world progresses, I stay as a wooden sink
is it my fault I was born with the things I have?
God what did I do? Why did you bring your wrath?
I cry at night, the city lights shine so bright
I fight the knife everyday I live my life
the light inside is burning, I can't get out
I pant and shout, it's what my poetry is about
day by day, life is no longer what it seems
I know I will never make it, but I dream
I am a human being, blood flows as lucid streams
In a life of sorrow we all see cupid bleed.

This life burns as I walk the hallways of death
continue to walk, even if I loose my breath
trial and tribulations, pain is deep inside
a life alone is better then a life of lies

Ghosts of my past fight with my future
boxing with God, playing cards with lucifer
shadows speak with bliss, people fly away
I'm slipping, I'm falling in feeble greed today
You look at me as a child, I see your doubt
let me step in your shoes to see what free's about
In my heart I died, my soul lives on
my bones are gone, why did I live so long?
on my arms are scars, in my mind is life
yet on my mind is death, misery and strife
If I call your name, will you answer me back?
No, you will ignore me cause' it's cancer I lack
Please! I will never again doubt the truth
God take this leech before it sucks out my youth
I battle my demons, sin begins to start
If I die, atleast I spoke what's in my heart.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby Solace » Mar 7th, '09, 02:17

Holy...shit...

That was awesome man. I have to say this is the best youve done so far. I even place it about your verse on Misery Loves Company. Damn. Your flow was good as usual but your delivery was improved as well and the chorus was brilliant. Fuck. This is like a milestone for you, really. Great job man, I may seem like I'm trying to ride your nuts to other members but this is impressive compared to all of your previous tracks. And you only started recording in Dec...Damn.
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 7th, '09, 02:23

Solace wrote:Holy...shit...

That was awesome man. I have to say this is the best youve done so far. I even place it about your verse on Misery Loves Company. Damn. Your flow was good as usual but your delivery was improved as well and the chorus was brilliant. Fuck. This is like a milestone for you, really. Great job man, I may seem like I'm trying to ride your nuts to other members but this is impressive compared to all of your previous tracks. And you only started recording in Dec...Damn.

Thanks dude! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby Requiem » Mar 7th, '09, 04:07

love the beat man. the reverb is really good on the chorus, but i wasn't feelin the hook...
the verse is sick as shit. i think it's ur best yet. i can understand every word, ur flow is great, and ur lyrics are awesome. i'm not dickridin neither, but that's a great flow u had through the whole verse.

i loved the second verse, the rhymes weren't as good as verse 1, but ur emotion was awesome. u sounded really comfortable with rhymin, which is a huge step forward from our iller than average days.

verse 3 was incredible, and the "lucifer" line was :worship: again, ur flow was on point, and ur delivery was great.

overall 9/10. ur BEST track to date, mixing was great, not feelin the hook. but the verses more than made up for it.

btw, it may not be in TR's best, but i think it should definitely be considered. great track :8)
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 7th, '09, 04:19

Ice Killa wrote:love the beat man. the reverb is really good on the chorus, but i wasn't feelin the hook...
the verse is sick as shit. i think it's ur best yet. i can understand every word, ur flow is great, and ur lyrics are awesome. i'm not dickridin neither, but that's a great flow u had through the whole verse.

i loved the second verse, the rhymes weren't as good as verse 1, but ur emotion was awesome. u sounded really comfortable with rhymin, which is a huge step forward from our iller than average days.

verse 3 was incredible, and the "lucifer" line was :worship: again, ur flow was on point, and ur delivery was great.

overall 9/10. ur BEST track to date, mixing was great, not feelin the hook. but the verses more than made up for it.

btw, it may not be in TR's best, but i think it should definitely be considered. great track :8)

Thanks for the feed bro! :y:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby slimsoxshady » Mar 7th, '09, 05:14

even though i can't relate to what ur saying, i felt i should give u props on the vocab, great word choices...and better mixing then the last time i heard u which was like a month a go i think...keep doin it man, but try and mix in some happy songs once in a while :flower:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby enjinn » Mar 7th, '09, 10:29

i can relate to this...love your energy on this...lyrics is something id write...we really need to collab
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 7th, '09, 12:33

yo yo MC it's the best i hve heard from ya so far , your flow is better your delivey was much better comparing with others, lyrics were there as usuall they are good you got the emotion in the lyrics and in your voice , i liked your second verse better, the chorus was cathcy and beat is sick ,, much improvement bro ,, keep it up though ,, gd luck :y:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Mar 7th, '09, 13:06

damn you defo improved....your flow is much better,much more calm....
lyrics are nice as most of the time...delievery is more calm too....
good way on improving :y: ..did you mix it? :whistle:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 7th, '09, 17:00

Thanks guys for the feed! Much much appreciated! :worship:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby Le Tunisien » Mar 7th, '09, 17:11

cuz i dissed u , doesnt mean i dont like ur music, this track is crazy good flow and nice verses and lot of energy :y: i like it :8)
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 7th, '09, 17:51

Thanks for the feed dudes! I'm working really hard to improve always! :y:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby mcZu » Mar 7th, '09, 18:24

Pretty dope indeed, lyrics are good, flow was on-point most off the time and the delivery deffinetly improved. Good beat choice, you have learned how to ride a beat -not perfect yet, but it's heading the right direction- and we could feel the energy. Emotions were vivid, nothing to complex, that's a good thing though 'cause it has a better impact now on people. Something understandable hit's people faster then complexity. Good job on the chorus, I would have repeated the chorus two times though, to fill up the empty space in between the verses.

Though their are some minor points:
-You need to work on the spit in your mouth, I can still hear it (nothing to severe though..)
-The flow looks good on paper, but you could play with it during the song. Going with the beat, riding it on your own way (just something you could try..)
-I dunno if you were aiming for the yelling kind off delivery :-k But if your delivery were smoother, it would have made the song more enjoyable imo. I know you were angry, but that could be expressed in different ways, nah what I mean?

Overall I enjoyed it, really. Much better then your previous work, keep this kind of work up.
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 7th, '09, 18:31

mcZu wrote:Pretty dope indeed, lyrics are good, flow was on-point most off the time and the delivery deffinetly improved. Good beat choice, you have learned how to ride a beat -not perfect yet, but it's heading the right direction- and we could feel the energy. Emotions were vivid, nothing to complex, that's a good thing though 'cause it has a better impact now on people. Something understandable hit's people faster then complexity. Good job on the chorus, I would have repeated the chorus two times though, to fill up the empty space in between the verses.

Though their are some minor points:
-You need to work on the spit in your mouth, I can still hear it (nothing to severe though..)
-The flow looks good on paper, but you could play with it during the song. Going with the beat, riding it on your own way (just something you could try..)
-I dunno if you were aiming for the yelling kind off delivery :-k But if your delivery were smoother, it would have made the song more enjoyable imo. I know you were angry, but that could be expressed in different ways, nah what I mean?

Overall I enjoyed it, really. Much better then your previous work, keep this kind of work up.

Great great feed man :worship:. I will definetly work on those points you mentioned! :flower:
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Re: My Life As It Is Written

Postby MC Anonymous » Mar 8th, '09, 22:15

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