Z to the double Izzo

[mcZu]

Z to the double Izzo
http://www.zshare.net/audio/5735260442e8348a/

Sorry for the quality, mic is kinda shitty..
Lyrics:

You may back like exelero up
When I grab the mic and flow like a cup
Being filled with some pure Evian
Lyrics like languages of aliens
I go over heads like a hood, its distance
I’ll never lower the amount of lyricism
Like the opposite of a sagged jean
No x-men but I do cut like wolverine
So it seems…I’m a lyrical machine
A microphone fiend, like Rakeem
I stay down with the king like run dmc
I run the beat like my rhymes got feet
I don’t pack heat like cold meals
But I could like putting them in a microwave
Microphone transmits my sound waves
Into the air, I go opposite of rewind like Nassir
Jones, I own a certain stone like solid throne
Connect always with rhymes like a cell phone
The Z like after Jay freestyle on H to the Izzo

Feed back would be appreciated,

[slimsoxshady]

solid rhymes...flow was off and on, kinda sounded like u were reading it off the paper but
the lyrics had me listening the whole way ...just need to upgrade the mic haha...if u can afford $100, u can get a solid condenser these days

[Xray]

The lyrics are good shit. I think your flow is going on and off because your not bouncing with the beat. It's a bouncy beat in a way, so you should of tried to bounce with it, like make your flow more active and alive. Your delivery is soft, your sort of whispering, which is because you don't want your family to hear you probably. But wait for a good chance to record, when no one is at home, record and just bring our your voice more. Your voice sounds cool, so I think with better delivery it would of been better. Keep working man, try record the more you can, the quicker you'll improve.

[mcZu]

Thanks to both of you, appreciate the indepth feed of both and the fact that you guys took time to listen.
Thanks again

[DelinQuent]

as xray said, the more you record, the better you'll get.

and i agree with what he also said about flow. you've gotta really get into what youre saying. stop reading it and start feeling it. rapping is a lot like acting.

deliver also needs work, but as xray said it sounds like you were just trying to keep it on the low so nobody heard, i used to do that too lol. your voice does sound like it has potential, so get some emotion into it.

keep working, as i've learned first hand, rap is something you can teach yourself, just takes a lot of time and effort.

[mcZu]

Thanks for checking man, appreciate it. Yeah I'll try to record as much as I can, and I'll try to get some better equipment. But thanks for checking man

[B.A.D.]

wow, lyrics are real good... very good creativity there

but you definitively need a recording program, if you can cool edit or sometin like that would help you a lot

also, you gotta put emotion in your flow, cuz other wise it will sound like a robot speaking ya feel me??

improve the emotion, feel the track, that will help you

[mcZu]

Thanks man, I feel ya, I need a better mic and cool edit sounds like a good program to use. I'll try put in some more emotion. Thanks for checking it out man, appreciate it.

[Emadyville]

There was good creativity in what your verse there, I would just listen to what everyone else said about flow and delivery cause they know what they're talking about, especially how DQ said you have to start feelin it when you flow. Good work tho, the verse itself was impressive.