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Postby threeandtwenty » Apr 23rd, '09, 11:38

My first freestyle...would muchly appreciate any feed back (ANYBODY with ANY suggestion,because i dont plan on stopping and i need to get better).
thanks to (DQ,Chris,Jay-19,Brutus,Kez,Mo Brat) for replying to my a-b-c thread.started things off.

did it live,had to do it in one take...i live in a hostel so it feels weird rapping without a beat in front of everyone else.also the pella quality was better like this,probably because you go 'in' better with a beat out loud.

Word-My Name is Word.mp3

My Name Is Word (over shyne/willin to try)

[mic check]
do a drive by on your verse with just words
my metaphors will have yours for desserts
my flow so cold it'll stops any motion
if i go radio youll be tunin the ocean
i like fire so you might hear an explosion
black night on a beat my horse is a trojan
if ya dont get my adjectives,dont blame the spit
took a handful of laxatives and became the shit

if i write it i dont edit,dont take back blows
but i wont even reply if you step on my toes
the beat eat you alive,my jaw stay closed
bring beef to your door like dominoes

drop a single every day,an album a week
if you cry foul play ill assume a defeat
the cd isnt free it costs people 50 cents
curtis when you hear this thats really a compliment
gimmie a sen-ten-ce now 25 to life
coz im committing a crime sometime in life
ill do it when im free,just show me my cell
could use the publicity of celebrity jail
low down and dirty we dont play by the book
take a shot at me and scrathc'll hit you with the hook
underground internet rappers stand up
just our mic checks will leave the main stream fucked


date is 2009 april twenty third
what up world,my name is word

2009...april twenty third
at least remember the name is word
[me doing cham hook]


quality isn't great,basic mic.
before i got on tr i never wanted to get stuff i wrote on a beat,because where i live not many people are into rap.so thanks to all y'all. :worship:...you people practically taught me how to flow lol
whose arm is this?..i must've cut it off at the pharmacist
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Re: Word-My Name is Word

Postby soperman005 » Apr 23rd, '09, 16:32

shits dope.. i like the laxative line lol.

keep it up.

btw.. can you gimme some feedback on my song "My Address"?
Thanks.
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Re: Word-My Name is Word

Postby MoBrat » Apr 24th, '09, 02:56

sounds good :y: nice flow ur vocals are at a decent level now only problem i have with it is this part > the cd isnt free it costs people 50 cents
curtis when you hear this thats really a compliment
gimmie a sen-ten-ce now 25 to life

it pops multiple times during this part like ur 2 close 2 the mic or just tryin hard to keep ur flow and breath and end up makin it pop as well as the ending it pops a bit but its a very damn good track....o and dont call this a freestyle if u are going to write underneath u wrote it lol but keep it up n thanks 4 mention
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Re: Word-My Name is Word

Postby threeandtwenty » Apr 24th, '09, 18:47

thanks a lot guys :happy:
would like more opinions to improve,if anyones got any.
MoBrat wrote:..o and dont call this a freestyle if u are going to write underneath u wrote it lol

scrawled it down in the bus...why people dont write down frees?
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Re: Word-My Name is Word

Postby threeandtwenty » Apr 28th, '09, 16:19

guess i took the words right out of your mouth...

oh and apparently,one doesnt write down frees..meh,kinda new to this.i thought a freestyle was something just pulled together,but not written as one piece.
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Re: Word-My Name is Word

Postby Xray » Apr 29th, '09, 07:37

The flow seems ok, but nothing brilliant. I did realize that you have an accent, I thought you were from America for some reason lol. But its not a strong accent so I can understand it, but it does need improving if you wanna rap in english. The lyrics are cool and all, but its the delivery that sounds really cocky. I don't like it, its annoying, and the mixing is very unorganized. Sounds like all you did was EQ it mostly, I can't hear any compressors in it. But not bad man, keep working. :y:
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Re: Word-My Name is Word

Postby threeandtwenty » Apr 29th, '09, 16:03

thank you mister,for looking at it :worship:
Xray wrote: Sounds like all you did was EQ it mostly, I can't hear any compressors in it.

hahaha,you're very correct.i have no idea what a compressor is...i played the beat through my speakers,brought the mic close to my face and spit straight.that why there're gaps,i ran outta breath.

however ive done a second track that ill up in a day or so...hopefully ive done better in that.i tried to mix a bit on that,and put in a hook and all.
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