[NEW] SajN Feat. C-Riz - We Stand Revolution (!!!)

[SajN]

SajN is back ... along with C-Riz!


We have made a sequel to our song (and my first) We Stand (if you haven't heard it, PM me)

Here is We Stand Revolution!!
Produced by Shadowville!


http://www.zshare.net/audio/59586907bb6ec75d/


Be nice

[Verse 1, SajN]
As soon as I hear ‘em, I just wanna hide
Let out a tear and, go to the room and cry
Being mad at the parents, is not something I like
But I can’t continue the fake life anymore
I got anger, and still room for plenty more
See, I wanna move out way before I am twenty-fore
And therefore, till that day comes
The rage inside my veins will keep explode like a bomb
Because man, these parents never stop
Yeah they should care, but come on man
Sometimes my parents are caring too much
You’re just a kid, we’re grown up
Say your shit, but you know what
We know everything, you don’t make sense Fahad
We’re older, and you just ain’t smart
And if I say something, a new argument starts

[Chorus, C-Riz]
We stand here the revolution is on
We stand strong all alone with this song
Just take minit remember how it was
When we stood tall askin wut we did wrong


[Verse 2, C-Riz]
Knock Kock same scenario do we still stand
Yes but this time the future put in our hands
It is our chance let’s do it pushin forward
Let's hang our past on hold into a wardrobe
So sore, we still managed to survive
Pain, suffer the obstacles of a human life
We all been thru this even you and i
Never had to miss this certain point of time
When all people left us alone in the dark
everything is getting cold in your heart
the weight on your shoulder increase twofold
the reaction to our action really pushes upon
us,we get ‘em back I gonna promise this
too all honest kids equipped with common sense
and since we stand all alone defending our pride
let's get up, stand up we ready for our fight

[Chorus, C-Riz]
We stand here the revolution is on
We stand strong all alone with this song
Just take minit remember how it was
When we stood tall askin wut we did wrong


[Verse 3, SajN]
Now what, you never thought this would happen
Your little kid grows up and he starts rappin
Are you afraid I won’t have a good life?
That I will join gangs and be involved on blood fights?
I wish I knew what this relationship was going into
If I knew I was going to grow up against you
I would’ve for a long time picked up the pencil
And show you the thoughts my mind has been to
Cuz you’ve made my heart feel so shady
And I don’t know how more I can take it, so
As soon as I have some money in my pocket
I will finally go and clean out my closet
And finally release the stress you’ve been causing
And see success in the life that I wanted
I appreciate that I had both mom and dad
But you only resulted in me going mad


[Chorus, C-Riz]
We stand here the revolution is on
We stand strong all alone with this song
Just take minit remember how it was
When we stood tall askin wut we did wrong

[ShAdY CaPo 08]

i couldnt understand a word that was said... what country are you from?

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

haha umm i can give you my lyrics...but i guess i wait till sajn posts up his lyrics too so we summarize all lyrics....and he's from norway.....lol any other feed on my part too or was the guy who couldnt pronounce a word me? ...im 2nd guy if people dont know

[SajN]

Lyrics are up now...

[Slimm]

I liked the song, but the hook was about some huge revolution and the verse was about having trouble with your parents. MAybe another hook would of been better. I still like the verses though, Sajn i liked your flow towards the end of the first verse. Lyrics were pretty simple but i dont mind that.

Criz your delivery was dope, huge improvement from the last stuff i checked. Liked your lyrics too.

Good song.

[DelinQuent]

sajn, you need a lot of work on your english speaking skills. i like your lyrics tho. with better english you'd be able to flow better as well. keep working man.

c-riz, chorus was eh, not catchy enough. but not bad. verse had good flow and decent rhyming. not a bad verse, good job

sajn, this verse was better. the rhyming off the "pencil" rhyme was nice, i liked that. flow was still not good.

overall 4/10. i don't mean to be harsh. i'm just trying to motivate sajn to work on his english. you've got the writing part down, but now it's time to learn how to actually rap those lyrics. keep at it, with time you will improve.

[SajN]

I liked the song, but the hook was about some huge revolution and the verse was about having trouble with your parents. MAybe another hook would of been better. I still like the verses though, Sajn i liked your flow towards the end of the first verse. Lyrics were pretty simple but i dont mind that.

Criz your delivery was dope, huge improvement from the last stuff i checked. Liked your lyrics too.

Good song.

thanks mayne

sajn, you need a lot of work on your english speaking skills. i like your lyrics tho. with better english you'd be able to flow better as well. keep working man.

c-riz, chorus was eh, not catchy enough. but not bad. verse had good flow and decent rhyming. not a bad verse, good job

sajn, this verse was better. the rhyming off the "pencil" rhyme was nice, i liked that. flow was still not good.

overall 4/10. i don't mean to be harsh. i'm just trying to motivate sajn to work on his english. you've got the writing part down, but now it's time to learn how to actually rap those lyrics. keep at it, with time you will improve.

Yeah, I am trying to improve my english, but, unfortunately, some thing takes time, some thing doesn't
thanks bro

[threeandtwenty]

contrary to everyone till now i think the accent brings originality.
sajn i think you're trying too hard to make you're lyrics whole sentences.ditch the i's unless necessary,you're the topic of the verse,its not really needed.

also i think you should try to make rhyming lines the same length [see c-riz verse]

Are you afraid I won’t have a good life?
join gangs,and be involved in blood fights?
wish I knew what this relationship was going into
If I knew I was going to grow up going against you

you get the picture?think it may help you flow better.
just my 2cents.

and c-riz verse..good one,

[randomghost]

haha i used the same beat for ma underground tracks sajn lyrics is good...delivery aint that good though..it needs to be more energitic...flow is good.....hook is good..better than mine haha c-riz's verse is nice....good style....nice mixing & mastering...good stuff...liked the song

[SajN]

Quality was great for me

As you know, the english needs work. I like your lyrics SajN, simple and emotional.

Good enjoyable verse C-Riz, I found it way too happy. You were dropping some angel shit .

But besides it being super nice, it was a good verse man.

Chorus is very forgettable, but it does a decent job.

2nd verse is a improvement on the english I think. Again, very nice lyrics, very nice and from the heart.


I'll admit the accent hurt your song a lot. But as you said, that's gonna take a while. So just give it time, and don't give up.

6/10

thanks bro

contrary to everyone till now i think the accent brings originality.
sajn i think you're trying too hard to make you're lyrics whole sentences.ditch the i's unless necessary,you're the topic of the verse,its not really needed.

also i think you should try to make rhyming lines the same length [see c-riz verse]

Are you afraid I won’t have a good life?
join gangs,and be involved in blood fights?
wish I knew what this relationship was going into
If I knew I was going to grow up going against you

you get the picture?think it may help you flow better.
just my 2cents.

and c-riz verse..good one,

Yeah, I get you, and I will look at that next time when I write.
Thanks for the tip man

haha i used the same beat for ma underground tracks sajn lyrics is good...delivery aint that good though..it needs to be more energitic...flow is good.....hook is good..better than mine haha c-riz's verse is nice....good style....nice mixing & mastering...good stuff...liked the song

Thanks for checking out

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

thanks to everyone who gave it a listen

[Tash8]

i wish people would stop making emotional songs on here... we can't relate to you because we don't understand your story... naw'mean? the reason eminem emotional songs are so sick is because we know the background of everything, unless you wanna tell us that then this is pointless

i'd prefer to hear some hard punchlines with some witty wordplay, but oh well

i'll give real feed when i get back from school, but do you guys at least understand where i'm coming from?

[Jay-19]

Pretty much everything I want to say has already been said.

SajN, you need to work on your pronunciation and delivery. You got the lyrics locked and the flow is okay.
I like the concept on the song.

C-RIz, well done man. You flow nicely and got an okay delivery, could be better but it's still okay.

Hook could be a lot better in my opinion.


Yeah, pretty much what I had to say. Not the deepest kind of feedback, but hey... it's all been said.

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

thank you jay-19....waitin tash

[SajN]

Pretty much everything I want to say has already been said.

SajN, you need to work on your pronunciation and delivery. You got the lyrics locked and the flow is okay.
I like the concept on the song.

C-RIz, well done man. You flow nicely and got an okay delivery, could be better but it's still okay.

Hook could be a lot better in my opinion.


Yeah, pretty much what I had to say. Not the deepest kind of feedback, but hey... it's all been said.

Thanks bro

i wish people would stop making emotional songs on here... we can't relate to you because we don't understand your story... naw'mean? the reason eminem emotional songs are so sick is because we know the background of everything, unless you wanna tell us that then this is pointless

i'd prefer to hear some hard punchlines with some witty wordplay, but oh well

i'll give real feed when i get back from school, but do you guys at least understand where i'm coming from?

I get what you mean