Spyder - Without You

[Spyder]

srry bout the quality but the olny thing availible for me
propz to Big Ax-D for the cover


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3Evwc866UIg

My innocence in a sense represents who I am
And without you I don’t know who that is.
It’s funny cuz it ain’t even about money
For you or for me, we both just want company
And luckily I have you to hold on to me.
Whats wrong with me I display love for all to see.
I just wanna make sure that you stick around
And I don’t mess it up wit my clowin around.
When I start to float our the one who pulls me down
To the ground I’m so happy with what I found
Baby girl I just wanna have a nice talk
Cuz run, sprint, jog, or walk
I’ll be there at 3 am on your block.
Im beggin and pleadin to get you back to me
You slap me in the face, my thoughts exactly
But anything you heard from your friends isn’t true
Cuz I don’t know what the fuck I’d do without you.


I can’t imagine the bad habits I’ve been havin
Disregardin you playin a fool, all because of rappin.
It’s tragic I wanna take a moment to apologize
Before you start to cry and are left with hollow eyes.
Baby I’m on my knees beggin please
Cuz I can’t see you with anyone but me
I know that these words come from me so easily
But the plans for my actions didn’t work out so conveniently.
I’m askin for you to come back home
I don’t wanna be alone callin you on the phone
Baby you know I’m attention prone.
But it’s time for me to be a soldier
Were older but this house is gettin colder.
I guess it sucks cuz I have no one to run to
Just wanted you to know I place no one above you
Because when the effects happen like we no the drugs do
I’d be gaspin and weezy and use my very last breath
To tell you that I love you


I cannot go to the ocean
I cannot drive the streets at night
I cannot wake up in the morning
Without you on my mind
So you're gone and I'm haunted
And I bet you are just fine
Did I make it that
Easy to walk right in and out
Of my life?
I cannot go to the ocean
I cannot drive the streets at night
I cannot wake up in the morning
Without you on my mind
So you're gone and I'm haunted
And I bet you are just fine
Did I make it that
Easy to walk right in and out
Of my life?

[Solace]

This is like my first track, the way you rapped you. You just talking. Does it sound like any rappers just talk and record it? You gotta RAP it. You sounded bored as fuck, you were just talking and not rapping therefore no obvious flow was there and people get so distracted by the non existant flow and delivery that the lyrics just slipped through. Quality aint that bad. Excellent beat and chorus sample or whatever. Good lyrics. Just goddamn, yell it dude. Re-record this def. Dope cover

[Spyder]

alright man, thanks for the help

[gutawafang]

I like the lyrics alot. But you should edit your voice to make i to sound audible. It would've been perfect if you ain't monotonous.

[Spyder]

ight dude thanks

[Robbie G]

The lyrics were fine but I agree with Solace about the delivery. You need to put emotion into it when you rap or else the listener will be bored listening to it.

Not too bad though just keep at it.