*New* Time To Shine - Feedback Please.

[theJFKshow]

My friends and I spent all night making this. I wrote most of the first verse and I am the 2nd verse. No, that's not me on the intro.

Feedback please (on lyrics, quality, etc).


http://www.zshare.net/audio/652889874da79754/
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KkS2PxpHjCM

[theJFKshow]

oh hey thanks for the input guys

[Emadyville]

Alright, I thought the first verse had dope rhymes, pretty good lyrics, but the delivery lacked some. The hook lacked delivery as well, but it wasn't bad. Second verse flowed really well, again dope rhymes. Third verse had the weakest rhymes but they were still good, just not up there with the other 2 verses, and the delivery lacked some but was better than the first verses. Overall it was pretty good

[theJFKshow]

Alright, I thought the first verse had dope rhymes, pretty good lyrics, but the delivery lacked some. The hook lacked delivery as well, but it wasn't bad. Second verse flowed really well, again dope rhymes. Third verse had the weakest rhymes but they were still good, just not up there with the other 2 verses, and the delivery lacked some but was better than the first verses. Overall it was pretty good

Thanks for the input, I think Mike is going to redo his verse and 'fyacracka' came over drunk when he did his.

[theJFKshow]

why thank you