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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby Mr. Chambers » Sep 18th, '09, 07:16

meh.............

honestly..........your delivery is kinda boring.......so it automatically makes it kinda hard to dig your shit....but that aside...your flow is shakey......i just can't decide if its cuz your accent or your rhyme scheme................

as far as your accent.....don't try to "americanize" it...let it remain as thick as it always is..........just do you............
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby Xray » Sep 18th, '09, 07:27

3rd/5th - Both those song previews were dope. Loved the beats for both songs. 4th preview was alright, tash produced it right? just wasn't feeling his singing on the hook, ruined it imo.

6th, lol me and ax-d used that beat for his album. Verse was alright though, just needs re-recording cause your flow is shaky on it, I think you need more syllables in your lines to flow it better.

I'll be checking this out when it drops. :y:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 18th, '09, 10:45

chambers wrote:meh.............

honestly..........your delivery is kinda boring.......so it automatically makes it kinda hard to dig your shit....but that aside...your flow is shakey......i just can't decide if its cuz your accent or your rhyme scheme................

as far as your accent.....don't try to "americanize" it...let it remain as thick as it always is..........just do you............



thanks man, appreciate the feed :y: whats up with the rhyme scheme :sweating: i mean what dont you think you like about it ? to simple or what :sweating:

Xray wrote:3rd/5th - Both those song previews were dope. Loved the beats for both songs. 4th preview was alright, tash produced it right? just wasn't feeling his singing on the hook, ruined it imo.

6th, lol me and ax-d used that beat for his album. Verse was alright though, just needs re-recording cause your flow is shaky on it, I think you need more syllables in your lines to flow it better.

I'll be checking this out when it drops. :y:


thanks man, appreciate the feed :worship:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Sep 18th, '09, 12:02

Broke Alcoholic Rapper :o thats genious and funny at the same time....like it already
lyrics are complex from the parts i understood ( :sweating: )
i actually liked tash's hook and you coming hard on his beat...
1st track was kool aswell had a nice flow....
6th wasnt that great..flow didnt catch me....
2nd was nice again..loved how you vibed on it and controlled the beat
3rd...yeah seems kinda shaky..idk wasnt feeling it...
but i defo lookin for the album...
BUT honestly what i heard...it wont top Fuck The System tho :zipped:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 18th, '09, 16:46

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:Broke Alcoholic Rapper :o thats genious and funny at the same time....like it already
lyrics are complex from the parts i understood ( :sweating: )
i actually liked tash's hook and you coming hard on his beat...
1st track was kool aswell had a nice flow....
6th wasnt that great..flow didnt catch me....
2nd was nice again..loved how you vibed on it and controlled the beat
3rd...yeah seems kinda shaky..idk wasnt feeling it...
but i defo lookin for the album...
BUT honestly what i heard...it wont top Fuck The System tho :zipped:



lol thanks man :y: and trust me this will top Fuck The System :y:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 18th, '09, 17:33

i liked the beats ,,, they are dope ,, your voice is cool for me , maybe you will drop your mixtape with eminem i guess ,, :flower:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby S0 R3@L » Sep 23rd, '09, 23:15

stick to listening rather then tryin to participate.

Rhyming words used for the sake of them.I mean you say shit like 'im tryna slow the pace'....why would you do that? its just obviously used for rhyming sake without a moments thought of sense.
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 23rd, '09, 23:51

S0 R3@L wrote:stick to listening rather then tryin to participate.

Rhyming words used for the sake of them.I mean you say shit like 'im tryna slow the pace'....why would you do that? its just obviously used for rhyming sake without a moments thought of sense.


from doin 1-2 tracks a week, to not recording a full track in a year, is the pace of witch your doing something slowing down...so to sum that up the person would be "slowing the pace down" of whatever it is there doin and if someone intentionally knew they were tryna slow down they would say "im tryna slow the pace"


holy shit that statment has got thought and does make sense.... :unsure:

although im pretty sure i dont say that at all in any of the preview i do say

"this aint rapping to race, so dont think im slowing down coz i aint catching the pace"

and that line rhymes words yes...also makes sense, or do you want me to spell it out for you ?

now if your in a dick mood go make a joke about my accent or pronouncation to justify whatever it is your tryna do here :unsure:


anywae, feedbacks appreciated keeep it coming :worship:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby B.A.D. » Sep 24th, '09, 01:56

Diamonds in The rough from Track Bangas?????? daymnnnnnn

yo, chea "Read My Mind (feat. Big Ax-D)" wooord hahaha

lookin forward for the bar comeback man :worship: :worship: :worship:

lmao at the le tunisien comment hahaha
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 24th, '09, 16:28

Big Ax-D wrote:Diamonds in The rough from Track Bangas?????? daymnnnnnn

yo, chea "Read My Mind (feat. Big Ax-D)" wooord hahaha

lookin forward for the bar comeback man :worship: :worship: :worship:

lmao at the le tunisien comment hahaha


yeh, and yeh it should be fully mixed soon man, i got my equipment set up in my mates spare room so once i sort ot a couple of technical hicthes ill have 24/7 recording time to perfect everything :y:
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby Kez » Sep 25th, '09, 21:21

S0 R3@L wrote:stick to listening rather then tryin to participate.

Rhyming words used for the sake of them.I mean you say shit like 'im tryna slow the pace'....why would you do that? its just obviously used for rhyming sake without a moments thought of sense.


Real? The fuck?

Why a new account?

Damn i hope you stay around to check my shit when i put out a track

Anyway Bar already knows what i think of the track, me and him working on some stuff
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Re: There's A War Brewin...

Postby Vettori » Sep 27th, '09, 12:58

I was gonna comment about the mixing also, haha but thats when i read ur Description. Was like Umm didnt he have better quality then that ? lol.. anyways as for Flow, You know what ur doin. I couldnt help but to hear, that it sounds like ur reading from something.. U need to make it more natural, Ive heard better songs from u, Just by expression alone. so try mixing it up a bit, try some new delivery, make ur voice do somee things yu probably wouldnt consider.. Thats the beuaty of recording. if yu dont like it yu can Toss it. but Yu always get to experiment Good job man
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