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Sad at the end "AUDIO, full song"

Postby xariuss » Dec 6th, '05, 09:46

Yo, this is my first full song, and by hearing the final cut i can tell my errors and the postive stuff... so i'll learn off this one... anyways have a listen ya'll.. tell me what you'se think

http://s23.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=1LW7 ... 4XJYBFCLW9


pls leave reply, of what u think... here's the lyrics if u can't understand propley


(Verse 1)
Have you ever got, your ass blasted off pot
an everything is serious, whether your laughing or not
cause the trash you got
had you passing to dust
you ain
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Postby HAYZI » Dec 6th, '05, 20:26

Nice, i liked it, it was well writen and oyuve got ur feelings acros well.


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Postby xariuss » Dec 6th, '05, 21:51

thanks man, i might redo it to rap it propley
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Postby archangel603 » Dec 7th, '05, 01:00

it was tight, and itll be alot better when/if you rap better to the beat.. post it if you re-do it i wanna hear it
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Postby xariuss » Dec 7th, '05, 07:11

yeah i might redo it propley , thanks
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Postby SilverAthlon » Dec 7th, '05, 07:16

Real nice....luved da flow...

I reckon u cud have used a meaner voice...if u get wat i mean...
but otherwise nice work...keep it comin!
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Postby xariuss » Dec 7th, '05, 10:15

thanks, yeah i wanted to use a louder voice, it's just my mic becomes distroted, i need to buy a proper mic, but thanks.. the flow wuda been better with more anger , so it may still yet to be re-done
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Postby Vettori » Jan 6th, '06, 01:30

Your lyrics are way too plain ....Add more effects, and emotion, and meaning....It really bored me..I'm sorry for being honest....
Other then that....Nice attempt, All i can say is you need work
Peace yo keep it up
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Postby Rae » Feb 13th, '06, 01:12

i liked it! :wave:
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