Stay Fresh

[TripleNineThree]

New song I'm working on, the first verse for the most part with the mixing is all done, then 2nd verse is just the straight rap no mixing on it yet but comment on the flow anyways any comments appreciated!

http://www.zshare.net/audio/68988426dd193e5c/

Oh and its a Christian song and I know that mite not be you style but just drop feedback on the actual rapping, thanks and I'll rtf just drop a link

Verse 1
I be stayin fresh but not cuz I look fine
I'm fresh to the death and its not cuz I rhyme

Its cuz every breath imma praise him up high
Got me feelin so clean so its not about my ride

...They be lookin mean cuz they say you ain't real
Their like triple nine three, whats the deal?

...They say its a faze and they just want the old me
They say im in a daze say that my faith is phony

His name I'm gonna raise hes my true homie
All I need is Christ and whenever I feel lonely

I think about his life and the things that he showed me
I'm runnin to the light if you don't whats your purpose?

...You feel depressed cuz you thinkin that you're worthless
You think you're just a mess but homie you're blood purchased

We all have stress and life we wanna curse it
But your fresh afta death if your flesh is bein bursted!


Verse 2
Yeah you're shinin got alotta ice
And when you be rhymin they sayin that its nice

Well guess what its time in and i'm comin with the Christ
And from the bottom I be climbin when I rep him on the mic

...I know if I'm diein I will be in his sight
I'm gonna follow the lion and you know I'm gonna fight

While you follow the liein thats why you ain't at the light
Look at the last line... Do you get it?

Look at the way I rhyme and I'm reppin him when I spit it
Right now I be at my prime because the flame you know he lit it

So I'm gonna let it shine, stayin unashamed
I don't care about the rap I don't care about the fame

I don't care if you will clap I just wanna rep his name!
Go ahead n say I'm wack, I'm neva gonn change

Cuz hes got my back so I'll let the speakas bang
I'm fresh its a fact bringin the word to the game

[Slim Zaddy]

your flow is good , ,i did'nt enjoy the beat ,, and the voice back wioth the beat is annoying a little bit,,,,,, ya delivery is good on the 1st verse,, but could be better,,,,, but i enjoyed it ,,

[enjinn]

i didnt expect a christian rap song to have a beat like this...but i like it...lyrics were nice...its a good song

[TripleNineThree]

Thanks for the feed! and yeah I used what I thought sounded like a mainstream beat and turned it Christian hah

[_Ironic_]

beat is straight club shit, i dig.

yo the flow is not good on this, its not terrible but a little above. your delivery on the other hand stands out greatly, definitely enjoyable...up with your flow skills with connect words and your shit would be hot, overall this was better than I expected..beat goes hard for sure.

7.5/10