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Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 8th, '09, 07:06

Yo, new song here! This is the first song I've ever released that I felt like I was proud of... I'm planning on rerecording but that wont be a for a while so I figured I would release it.

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http://www.zshare.net/audio/6957773047bceed0/

all feedback is appreciated! thanks.
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 8th, '09, 07:07

Lyrics:

Yo, Yo, Yo

a look at the days when i had it all
my homies we chill, my bad girl uhh

ha, so much changed, it happened too quick
never celebrated, felt we flew thru it
i'm new to this, this life i have
ain't used to it, it's not like my last
but i'm takin a moment, to look at my past
before ya'll left, and went off to college
our high school last semester, nothing can top it
filled our brains up wit nutin but nonsense
all the great times from the games to the concerts
when scottys dad, saw us, being gay on the carpet
a year it was, what seemed unlikely
turned so real when I found whitney liked me
never thought a girl would change me so much
she made me who i am so its nothing but love
even if we dont talk much (any more)

*hook*
Oh I wish, that you'd know
that you'd always be my friend - for sure
and oh I wish that you'd say
you'd be here for me - every day
now i see, it'll never be the same
as I fall and trip down memory lane
fall and trip down memory lane
memory lane it wont be the same

it's 3 am and i'm still up writing
i feel that's the great thing 'bout me
--when it comes thing I love, I try so hard
even when I'm dealt these fucked up cards
ten years ago, I couldn't even speak a word of english
now i'm rapping, wish you could hear me spit this
--and oh how far I've come
from the day when I got in stupid fights for fun
lost most my cool, and then it's on
but then i grew up and made this song
talking about how my pain is gone
and fuck yall sayin i'm wrong
cause i know i'm not, your paintings off
redraw your thought, your cadence stopped


*hook*
Oh I wish, that you'd know
that you'd always be my friend - for sure
and oh I wish that you'd say
you'd be here for me - every day
now i see, it'll never be the same
as I fall and trip down memory lane
fall and trip down memory lane
memory lane it wont be the same

*bridge*
Once I blow up here, no stopping me
waiting on the clock, for the hating to seize
livin' my life, like homies what it do?
shit on your mind? then come on through
say it to my face, man i fuckin dare you to
straight to my face, why ain't you coming thru
yea we both know why, it'd be dumb of you to
yeah, yeah it'd be dumb of you to

I wonder where I'll be ten years from now
who I am, what I do, when where and how?
will I still be cool with those who I cared about?
I really can't tell, i hope that's the case, now
i'm moving on with this life I want
got the vision in my head, just gotta get it out
when I say 10 years, it better be, better than where I am now
cause i feel like i'm missin out these next few years
when ya'll moved on and left me here
but rest assured, i'm making the best from nothing
and there's no stopping me till i amount to something
yup, amount to something to make you proud, sooo

*hook*
Oh I wish, that you'd know
that you'd always be my friend - for sure
and oh I wish that you'd say
you'd be here for me - every day
now i see, it'll never be the same
as I fall and trip down memory lane
fall and trip down memory lane
memory lane it wont be the same

*bridge*
Once I blow up here, no stopping me
waiting on the clock, for the hating to seize
livin' my life, like homies what it do?
shit on your mind? then come on through
say it to my face, man i fuckin dare you to
straight to my face, why ain't you coming thru
yea we both know why, it'd be of dumb of you to
yeah, yeah it'd be dumb of you to
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Vettori » Dec 8th, '09, 13:50

Beat was a great choice.. very chillin.. and i agree this is ur smoothest recording, Chorus is wicked haha.. a few listens and ur singin it haha.. the verses have there meaning. Good work man, as i told u before. This is ur best :D i could name off the few mistakes.. but no need u held ur own very well,

Keep at it man
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 8th, '09, 17:47

thanks bro, and thx for the help
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Emadyville » Dec 8th, '09, 21:32

Beat was dope, great choice. Content was great and def fit into the concept 100%, hook was real good, very enjoyable and catchy. Delivery was very good as well, I would just say some bars seemed like you may have had too many syllables and it made the flow seem a little off at some spots. This was def a dope song tho, def has replay value, good work :y:
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 9th, '09, 00:51

Emadyville wrote:Beat was dope, great choice. Content was great and def fit into the concept 100%, hook was real good, very enjoyable and catchy. Delivery was very good as well, I would just say some bars seemed like you may have had too many syllables and it made the flow seem a little off at some spots. This was def a dope song tho, def has replay value, good work :y:


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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Mr. Chambers » Dec 9th, '09, 03:45

beat was sick...good choice for the song's content :y:

ok...the actual song...this was a dope song....but you can tell your still trying to find your flow......the fast paced flow was sick.....but sometimes even that was off beat.........try pacing your syllables so they even at first.....then once you master that...start throwing more syllables in if you wanna faster flow or take some out for a slower flow

delivery ain't bad...tho i think you could prolly pepper it up some more...lyrics are pretty good....they did the song justice

chorus woulda been cool...but once again your flow wasn't on lock in some lines.....

overall...the song as a whole was pretty good...just the technique was a lil off.......just keep practicing on the flow and i think you'll be pretty good....got potential.....
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 9th, '09, 03:48

chambers wrote:beat was sick...good choice for the song's content :y:

ok...the actual song...this was a dope song....but you can tell your still trying to find your flow......the fast paced flow was sick.....but sometimes even that was off beat.........try pacing your syllables so they even at first.....then once you master that...start throwing more syllables in if you wanna faster flow or take some out for a slower flow

delivery ain't bad...tho i think you could prolly pepper it up some more...lyrics are pretty good....they did the song justice

chorus woulda been cool...but once again your flow wasn't on lock in some lines.....

overall...the song as a whole was pretty good...just the technique was a lil off.......just keep practicing on the flow and i think you'll be pretty good....got potential.....


thanks man

what I got from what u said is the song was enjoyable but everything wasn't quite polished yet..right?
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby classthe_king » Dec 9th, '09, 04:58

One of the best songs ive heard from you. Beat is sick and goes great with the song. Chorus is great and extremely catchy. Quality and/or delivery is really good and clear. Diggin the flow to. Cant really find any faults tbh.
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Mr. Chambers » Dec 9th, '09, 05:04

^pretty much.....i think if you had a couple more years of experience behind you....this song woulda been classic.....its just i think your relatively new to this aspect of music and just made a few slip ups.........but your on the right track....just keep doing songs.....it all comes with practice trust me...my shit was horrible back when i first started.......you'll find your groove eventually...
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 9th, '09, 05:47

thanks for the feed guys
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby DelinQuent » Dec 9th, '09, 07:36

first verse, is that you punching in? if so, i'm not a fan, if not, nice flow. delivery is nice.

love the hook.

second verse is way better, love it. flow is better and so is the delivery, loved the last line.

third verse is nice too. love the lyrics about being left behind.

overall, flow is a bit jerky at times, but you did good with it. hook was great, absolutely perfect. good shit, you're getting better with every song.
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Dec 9th, '09, 11:33

nice mixing man...especially the hook...
i dont feel the bridge too much..feels like the timing is a lil off
somtimes you also slipped some words with the fast flow..but i could understand it overall..and 2nd listening with the lyrics i understood all :)
nice track man...hook is defo the main highlight of this song
also me liked your delivery man :y: rhymes were kool...but flow was crowded again :sweating:
track has its ups and downs...but the hook made up for it :y:
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby Tash8 » Dec 9th, '09, 18:41

tank you guys!
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Re: Memory Lane - **NEW**

Postby _Ironic_ » Dec 9th, '09, 23:55

not feelin the beat, ehhh

the flow is nice...nice and upbeat, smooth for the most part...

quality was kinda off, but its old so ehh its good for what it is.

chorus was actually pretty damn hot. :y:

pretty dope track..and good for a first time release, im sure u recorded before this, but as for the first song you're happy with..it's pretty solid. :b: :b:

3rd verse was best imo.
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