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Postby T-LAB » Jan 21st, '06, 02:38

i've came straight hungry from this empty plate/
with an appatite to infultrate and domenate.
T-LAB your great ok that's cool with me but wait/
i havent come to create something you can simualte.
parent's don't blame me from what i "generate"/
i'm not sorry that i innovate/
cause kid's emualte at an alarming rate.
since the age of eight i've built up enough hate/
through the mistake's i'd make and beatings from socalled mate's/
rap is just my gate to release it so i guess it was fate/
that i got this stone and slate with a game to penatrate.
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Postby Ivy » Jan 21st, '06, 02:48

T-LAB wrote:i've came straight hungry from this empty plate/
with an appatite to infultrate and domenate.
T-LAB your great ok that's cool with me but wait/
i havent come to create something you can simualte.
parent's don't blame me from what i "generate"/
i'm not sorry that i innovate/
cause kid's emualte at an alarming rate.
since the age of eight i've built up enough hate/
through the mistake's i'd make and beatings from socalled mate's/
rap is just my gate to release it so i guess it was fate/
that i got this stone and slate with a game to penatrate/


Love the first half, great vocab and shit, do you do audios?
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yea,.

Postby T-LAB » Jan 21st, '06, 02:57

Yeah i got audio's at http://www.soundclick.com/tlab r get at me at mailto:T_LAB@hotmail.com

the audio's ain't the best cause i'm using a shit mic at the min.
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Postby Ivy » Jan 21st, '06, 03:01

You got to do this verse in audio, just so I can hear what it sounds like. All that rhymin' and shit, ya know.
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"My life your entertainment, you watch it while I live it. I walk they folla (ay), I talk they holla (ay), just here for your amusement. My life your entertainment. you watch it while I live it. You waitin' for me to lose it, I guess I'm just here for your amusement..." ~ T.I. feat. Usher "My Life Your Entertainment"
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Postby Vettori » Jan 21st, '06, 19:53

LMFAO, Nice attempt...bro, I was gonna say the quility on ur soundclick ones, are Horrible, But yu explained it....Nice try tho man, keep it up, Try to Be clear on what yu say.... And add feelings into ur songs...

PS:yu dun sound like eminem lol, so dun worry
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Postby Ivy » Jan 21st, '06, 20:07

Faith99 wrote:LMFAO, Nice attempt...bro, I was gonna say the quility on ur soundclick ones, are Horrible, But yu explained it....Nice try tho man, keep it up, Try to Be clear on what yu say.... And add feelings into ur songs...

PS:yu dun sound like eminem lol, so dun worry


And he ain't tryin' to,..........I hope :unsure:
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Postby AspirinE » Jan 21st, '06, 20:45

i'm not sorry that i innovate/
cause kid's emualte at an alarming rate.


Eminem - stimulate :p


Lol but great shit keep it up.
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Postby em16 » Jan 24th, '06, 13:38

great shit homie... :D just keep it up... good vocab.. nice lyrics.. :D
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