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Fa-Q's 9/11 Tribute (Added a Chorus)

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 6th, '10, 05:28

Now I know there are a lot of Arab and Islamic members on this site. So I honestly mean no disrespect towards you're religeon. I understand that most Muslims aren't flying planes into buildings. Now I am showing respect so I ask that you show respect please. If you don't have anything nice to say, please don't leave a comment...enjoy for what it is.


I was just a kid, in fourth grade, a day to remember,
A day I wish, we could have gone away from September,
My teacher walked in, with tears in her eyes,
She told us in New York, that grey smoke smears the skies,
She told me, forever, she'll hear their cries,
All I see is their tears that streamed down her face,
So I decided I would search, and so I found the base,
I walked up to the base, one of the steel giants,
I ask God, I don't hate, yet I still feel defiant,
I hear the words the say, uttering cries, spoken fast,
Their bodies cut from head to toe, under broken glass,
Their faces covered, by melted steel, smoke and ash,
I whisper to God, "Under tons of steel, I found a hero,"
Wearing a firemans uniform, buried under ground zero,
Please God, if you answer back, give a sign of heaven,
I promise to You, I'll never forget the day of nine eleven,

There's not been a day, where I've forgotten, not one yet,
In New York City, I see tall buildings, in the silloette of the sun set,
But two are gone, since one September,
So now I promise you, I'll always remember,
They were gone one fall, they fell with the leaves,
I look upon the city, I can always tell it grieves,
So tell me, will you remember, past October, until December,
That day to remember, on the eleventh of September,

But will He answer back, to a mans cries,
For two buildings, that used to stand with skies,
They were, glorious buildings, each a hundred floors,
Two eagles, made with spirit, no wonder it soars,
I feel my skin tingle, on my skin, deep under the pores,
These men armed with fear, make us, thunder for wars,
In the hearts of America, the lightning strikes inside,
The anger, of what had happened, it lights our pride,
Everybody was terrified, all they could do was stair at the sky,
They didn't know what to do, ask where to hide,
The day after, we heard our new President prepare to guide,
And even the ones that didn't vote for him, tuned in,
And assumed then, that all of us, the entire nation,
Knew that it, no matter what, it was dire we embraced him,
He told us, all fear is gone, any tiny bit of coward folds,
And we will strike back, with more than fire in our souls,
Our enemies, do not know what our power holds,

There's not been a day, where I've forgotten, not one yet,
In New York City, I see tall buildings, in the silloette of the sun set,
But two are gone, since one September,
So now I promise you, I'll always remember,
They were gone one fall, they fell with the leaves,
I look upon the city, I can always tell it grieves,
So tell me, will you remember, past October, until December,
That day to remember, on the eleventh of September,

This is to all the families that lost someone, that fateful day,
Your loved ones are looking down from heavens gateway,
I want to take you all down to, times square,
Take them to ground zero, and see the crimes there,
The crimes of what those men, took from them,
Tell them all it'll be find, and to them, hum a hymn,
I would tell them, I remember and that I'll always, honor the lost,
Those enemies I gave the cold shoulder, there's longer frost,
But I feel your pain, on top of rubble my shame sits,
We are all the New York Giants, see the name fits,
Through all the smoke and ash, each of us breathes air,
Our nation, no matter what your belief, needs prayer,
Let's hope He blesses, our country, sea to shining sea,
If America comes calling, I hope they're finding me,
For each and every citizen's freedom, I'm ready to fight,
Eyes always forward, never looking back, steady is my sight,
I know what I fight for, even though my sights sore,
I know whatever I do, I'll remember, that fateful day in September,

There's not been a day, where I've forgotten, not one yet,
In New York City, I see tall buildings, in the silloette of the sun set,
But two are gone, since one September,
So now I promise you, I'll always remember,
They were gone one fall, they fell with the leaves,
I look upon the city, I can always tell it grieves,
So tell me, will you remember, past October, until December,
That day to remember, on the eleventh of September,
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Re: Fa-Q's 9/11 Tribute

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 6th, '10, 08:37

I dig it man emotional drop. I dug the concept of "stell giants" was really dope. Giid shit homie :y:
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Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 6th, '10, 08:38

I really feel the emotion/lyrics in this song. It's one of its highlights. :y:

Addressing the message, the Americans really need to wake up. No offense to anyone.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
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Postby Fa-Q » Jan 6th, '10, 11:36

Thanks A lot pink...I hope it has that affect on a lot more people...and thanks Jus and Relapse...you're right Relapse...America needs to wake up...
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Re: Fa-Q's 9/11 Tribute (Added a Chorus)

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 6th, '10, 11:38

Long ass chorus lol. I like it though
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Postby Nick. Y » Jan 6th, '10, 12:39

About this -no doubt it's lyrically very strong! But I think the towers were demolished by your former president,that's very likely you know.. So it's possible the Muslims don't have anything to do with it.Yet Bush was just a puppet and other personalities pulled his strings ,so you're right the American people need to wake up,but that is a discussion for another time and place perhaps ,Props for the writing, it's very affective
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Postby Fa-Q » Jan 6th, '10, 13:39

You're allowed to believe whatever you think...even if its wrong
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Postby Nick. Y » Jan 6th, '10, 13:45

you said it
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Postby Fa-Q » Jan 6th, '10, 22:48

Reguardless of what you think...this is a tribute to the buildings...don't feed if you're an asshole...sorry I didn't specify that
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Postby Relapse.LP » Jan 7th, '10, 00:24

Nick. Y wrote:About this -no doubt it's lyrically very strong! But I think the towers were demolished by your former president,that's very likely you know.. So it's possible the Muslims don't have anything to do with it.Yet Bush was just a puppet and other personalities pulled his strings ,so you're right the American people need to wake up,but that is a discussion for another time and place perhaps ,Props for the writing, it's very affective

I didn't mean say the Muslims have no part in this. I also did not say the government was responsible.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
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Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 7th, '10, 01:27

Nick. Y wrote:About this -no doubt it's lyrically very strong! But I think the towers were demolished by your former president,that's very likely you know.. So it's possible the Muslims don't have anything to do with it.Yet Bush was just a puppet and other personalities pulled his strings ,so you're right the American people need to wake up,but that is a discussion for another time and place perhaps ,Props for the writing, it's very affective

:shakehead: terroist wanna destroy us, my brother is a marine, so go fuck your self :flutter: and ii dont like bush, but i HIGHLYdoubt that he was involved

oh and i lvie in NY nice tribute man :worship:
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Postby Fa-Q » Jan 7th, '10, 02:28

Thanks for having my back BB and Menzo...its not about Bush, or what your political beliefs...its about what these building meant to a nation...whoever destroyed them, they're gone...and I wanted to write a song about it
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Postby Nick. Y » Jan 7th, '10, 11:02

yeah it's not the subject who's responsible,that's why I said I'm getting off the topic here and stopped talking about it.But you know what else? - I don't give two shits about you or what the fuck you think about me,I ain't gonna argue with some little cocks,who ain't having enough brain in their heads to understand what the fuck is happening in their country (no disrespect to others). Oh and am I a terrorist? - maybe , maybe not maybe fuck yourselves :)
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Postby Fa-Q » Jan 7th, '10, 22:36

I hope people like it for whatit is...
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Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 8th, '10, 02:08

Nick. Y wrote:yeah it's not the subject who's responsible,that's why I said I'm getting off the topic here and stopped talking about it.But you know what else? - I don't give two shits about you or what the fuck you think about me,I ain't gonna argue with some little cocks,who ain't having enough brain in their heads to understand what the fuck is happening in their country (no disrespect to others). Oh and am I a terrorist? - maybe , maybe not maybe fuck yourselves :)


also like the words you used and i also do like it alot
like i said NY.. R.I.P to people and stuff, nice song overall,

and for you mr. :shakehead: i know shit is going on. yea so chill, stop acting like you know more then me...
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