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First verse only.
JBM - Time for change
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JBM - Time for change
by JBM » Jan 5th, '10, 02:37
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by °[~CHR!$~]° » Jan 5th, '10, 13:11
delivery is very boring....i know its should be smooth but here its nuttin...
work on that...maybe imagine somthin sad b4 recording such stuff...
flow is actually nice....i can enjoy it....
pronouncation was okay too...öets say there's room for improvement
work on that...maybe imagine somthin sad b4 recording such stuff...
flow is actually nice....i can enjoy it....
pronouncation was okay too...öets say there's room for improvement
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by JBM » Jan 6th, '10, 00:17
I don't think the delivery is boring. It's slower and mellow for the song.
Anyway , thanks for the feed.
Anyway , thanks for the feed.
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by Tash8 » Jan 6th, '10, 01:56
good beat, i like that game song...
your delivery is quite boring but that's not because it's mellow but that's because ur mic quality picks up real shitty.. but that's not ur fault it's hard to do mellow deliveries with weak mics.. flow is nice, i was feelin the lyrics...it was decent man..not bad.
your delivery is quite boring but that's not because it's mellow but that's because ur mic quality picks up real shitty.. but that's not ur fault it's hard to do mellow deliveries with weak mics.. flow is nice, i was feelin the lyrics...it was decent man..not bad.
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by gutawafang » Jan 8th, '10, 04:48
It's pretty cool man. nice relaxing beat.
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by Just Silver » Jan 8th, '10, 05:29
very monotonic and boring audio is much harder than the lyrics themselves
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by jba1me » Jan 8th, '10, 08:49
beat was awesome it was like a mellow smooth one. the delivery was just dull 2 me. but keep it up.
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by i4ill » Jan 19th, '10, 12:13
Delivery needs some work but it wasn't THAT bad, just harmonize better with the beat. Flow was on point, I like it. Overall this was a decent track, keep working bro...
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 05:21
Your flow is way off at times and Delivery is very bland and not exciting
I'm not even gonna comment on quality...I think you already know it needs work
When you spit out a rhyme think of yourself arguing with someone else...Like your words are bullets and your tounges a pistol. Shoot those words like you want someones life to be changed by em...
Don't hold back any with the delivery give it your all
I'm not even gonna comment on quality...I think you already know it needs work
When you spit out a rhyme think of yourself arguing with someone else...Like your words are bullets and your tounges a pistol. Shoot those words like you want someones life to be changed by em...
Don't hold back any with the delivery give it your all
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: JBM - Time for change
by JBM » Jan 21st, '10, 15:33
Most-Hated wrote:Your flow is way off at times and Delivery is very bland and not exciting
I'm not even gonna comment on quality...I think you already know it needs work
When you spit out a rhyme think of yourself arguing with someone else...Like your words are bullets and your tounges a pistol. Shoot those words like you want someones life to be changed by em...
Don't hold back any with the delivery give it your all
Noted. thanks for the feed.
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