Master Chief wrote:Even after Class explained it, I still don't see much damage on the narrative and overall story/concept of Stay Wide Awake. (Key word: much). Of course, because of the sheer amount of multis he had to sacrifice some shit but it still came out good, story-telling wise.
The storytelling was decent, yes. There's not a massive amount of damage to the story/concept as a whole.
There is damage to the word choice to a ridiculous extent (I'm sure you can agree), some of the gramatical structure (quite a bit of the second verse and "Once I act like lumberjack") and the structure of the narrative at certain points - ie just a sudden switch from one point to the next, with nothing to fill in the gaps - it's just BANG BANG BANG - that's a flaw in the storytelling. .
Before you say I'm ignorant to Talib Kweli... I'm not. I've heard all of his official albums including his Reflection Eternal stuff. Admittedly, I wasn't thinking of quality when I said that. I was just thinking of amount. I will correct myself and say I believe Stay Wide Awake has more multies than Talib's discography.
I know that's true - what's your point? The two lines I posted have more multies than
"Thats why we sing for these kids who don't have a thing
Except for a dream and a fucking rap magazine"
But the multies obviously aren't better.
In SWA he rhymes like that for quite a few lines while focusing on the story and sacrificing less (again not as much as he normally could do). In conclusion, yes the multies do affect other areas of lyricism but he can't have it all can he? Anyway, I was strictly talking about multies, not lyricism in general.
I know you weren't talking about lyricism in general. But if multies are effecting other aspects of lyricism to the extent of SWA then they can't be considered as good as multies which don't effect other aspects of lyricism.
I'm still talking strictly multies - the effect they have, not just how many.
Master Chief wrote:Eminem has made a million songs about nothing yet they get praised. I'm Back isn't really about anything, yet it gets praised for its rhyming.
It's coherent, has no accent to force rhymes and adresses quite a few important issues.