New Song! Give it a listen.. think its worth time

[ProjectLopez]

New song! heard beat this morning popped this out before breakfast!
such a sick beat
By producer AllRounda
Give me feedback scribe comment!
Links to your page will do the same!
Enjoy
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V1cCVLEQ ... ideo_title

edited by mod:
FEED LINK:
viewtopic.php?f=38&t=111276&p=1589903#p1589903

[Scrubz]

read the rules man, you gotta give feedback prior to posting your song and provide the link of the feedback given... I will take a listen once you do.

[ProjectLopez]

Ahhh My bad I haven't used my account in forever on here! forgot the rules... :P
I think Ironically I clicked on your song! haha
viewtopic.php?f=38&t=111276&p=1589903#p1589903
it was real dope man.. clean clean flow using different words...

[Scrubz]

I liked the lyrics alot, but your flow was choppy which can be worked if you do it right but there were parts were you fell off. And I think your layers were off a little at part. Beat was dope! Delivery was good, you have good emotion in your words but need a little work on voice control. Overall the song was decent, held back by the actual performance.

To me it sounded like you recorded it once or twice and settled. Were you coulda smash this song out with a good couple hours perfecting it. Also by doing that it gives you practice which will improve your flow. Dont take it the wrong way, Im just tryin to give u a few pointers in my honest opinion.

So things you should work on imo:
Record till its perfect, listen to it for a while then go back and record it again!
Keep practicing with your flow, make sure the rhymes hit were they are suppose to, breath when you suppose to.
Try to go towards a little more fluid flow as well.

Again i mean no disrespect, just wanna help you improve cuz your a good writer and have a good voice for it. Keep dropping and it will all come together.

[jobsad]

Thanks for your nice link.

[Instant Legend]

likin this beat


your delivery is really unorthodox, but i kida like it...its like choppy, but intentionally - trippy, but cool

your voice is workin pretty well, and i can feel some of this content too

not bad homie

keep it movin!

[i4ill]

Nice intro and a good beat choice. I loved the content in this shit a lot, I can relate to some of it too. Some lines were quite deep and really made be just vibe to it. Flow was ok to say the least but it can be upped no doubt...I thought you were kinda struggling in certain spots, but overall it was cool. Delivery was mad nice, I LOVED it. The emotions were vivid and that's what I truly respect in any song. Lyrically, nothing was extra complex or so, but I'm sure this aint the track to go too lyrical with. I really liked this shit man, keep it up.

[TripleNineThree]

The delivery was really good, I could feel the emotion you put into it - 8/10

The flow was alright.. Just keep working on your flow it could improve - 6/10

Lyrics were good, the lyrics reminded me of something Eminem would spit - 9/10

Mixing - The mixing could have been improved, you said you just recorded this so that's understandable - Maybe add some addlibs in the background to fill it up more - make sure they don't over power the verse at all though - 7/10

Overall song - 7/10

Keep it up bro!

Mind returning the feed fam?? - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=112332