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I Got Over You

Postby Sophie » Jan 23rd, '07, 22:46

i was 2 scared 2 post this..but then i thought i would..but uhmm..cos its like completely different 2 what all of u guys write about...its all depressing..cos that seems the easiest thing 2 write about lol [this is a poem not a song] lol..but uhmm..yeah..it's my first ever proper poem..so i kno its kinda shit...idk if i repeat myself or not..idk if it makes sense...but yeah...give "constructive criticism" lol..but like i said..its my first ever poem like..ever..proper one lol..so dont be 2 harsh :unsure: lol..but uhmm..im still 2 scared 2 post this lmaoo..but yeah..here..anyways..uhmm..ok fuck it i might as well..


It was like a stab in my heart//
The way you tore me apart//
How could you do this too me//
Why could you just not leave me be.

The way you made me feel//
It was like my heart would never heal//
You cut it deep inside//
All I did was sit and cry.

But I got over you//
And you never thought that could be true//
But I proved you wrong//
All you did just made me strong.


there ya go..it seems depressing lol..but uhmm yeah..feedback?? pwease? :unsure:
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Postby Rae » Jan 24th, '07, 00:03

i like it.
its simple but deep in a way.
i like it hunn.

u should never be scared to post here lol.
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keep it up ;)
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Postby Sophie » Jan 24th, '07, 00:12

thanks :)
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Postby Flamez » Jan 24th, '07, 00:44

simple but deep i like it :8)

and don't be afraid to post anything hunn..
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Postby sinemm » Jan 24th, '07, 09:24

aw no its not shit..thats nice deep n meaningful like it
keep up :)
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Postby spitz » Jan 24th, '07, 09:28

its good, i like it. its simple, but it works for what ur tryna say.

dont be afraid to post shit, u never no, u might have the new sound.
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Postby Sophie » Jan 24th, '07, 13:13

thanks everyone :D

only thing is..i didnt kno what to call it..does any1 know what i could call it? :happy:


oh & ok i wont be afraid to post shit in future lol..thnx
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Postby 4D » Jan 24th, '07, 14:31

Call it "I Got Over You". ;)

Very nice poem, I liked it a lot!!
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Postby Sophie » Jan 24th, '07, 14:47

FORDIE wrote:Call it "I Got Over You". ;)

Very nice poem, I liked it a lot!!


ooh i like that name thanks :happy:
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Postby 4D » Jan 24th, '07, 14:52

:D Cool, glad ya like it, you wrote it! :)


That's what i always do, write the rhyme first, then when it's finished look through it for a line or phrase that sums it up! ;)
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Postby Sophie » Jan 24th, '07, 14:55

yeah thats what I was gonna do [write the rhyme first then think of a name] but I guess I couldn't think of one...if i write anymore & cant think of a name i'll come 2 u for help haha lol :happy:
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