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To A Sorry Father

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To A Sorry Father

Postby Rae » Apr 22nd, '07, 17:43

I just started talking to Paige,
And how we feel about you is something you cant change,
I
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 22nd, '07, 17:54

wow already you and your sis are writing together.. that's amazing :worship: :worship:


anyways, it's good but I don't know try using multis.
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Postby Rae » Apr 22nd, '07, 17:59

Tash8 wrote:wow already you and your sis are writing together.. that's amazing :worship: :worship:


anyways, it's good but I don't know try using multis.


lol nahh she writes poems ... i wrote this by myself.
i tried to make it be from both of our point of views. but sometimes i just talked about how i felt. lol

and i cant use multies for shit. i just dunno how. i cant think of any. haha

thanks for tha feedback btw.
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Postby Big-T » Apr 22nd, '07, 18:15

i read it its really powerful n quite sad but written well keep it up :flower:
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 22nd, '07, 18:17

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Postby Rae » Apr 22nd, '07, 18:23

^^ hey thanks :D

i apperciate it alot!
ima work on them ... :)

and yeah i cant spell for shit it is suppose to be through
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 22nd, '07, 18:29

yup no problem.
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Postby vermin » Apr 22nd, '07, 18:48

damn it sounds like you would write that about my Dad :confusion:

it just shows me more that no matter where you live, you have the same problems all over the world

incredible work, congratulations, keep doin it! :flower:
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 22nd, '07, 18:57

vermin wrote:damn it sounds like you would write that about my Dad :confusion:

it just shows me more that no matter where you live, you have the same problems all over the world

incredible work, congratulations, keep doin it! :flower:


yea man, i wrote something like this a while ago too, everyone feels similar at some point
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Postby Rae » Apr 22nd, '07, 19:02

thanks vermin. :)

yeah it sucks that some fathers cant step up ... smh.

but writing helps to write and let it out. :)
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Postby C-Game » Apr 22nd, '07, 19:03

i talked to u on MSN .. and i know wat u mean...

good work hon...

and too bad its true.. :(
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Postby Rae » Apr 22nd, '07, 19:05

C-Game wrote:i talked to u on MSN .. and i know wat u mean...

good work hon...

and too bad its true.. :(

yeah but then again i can look at it in a good way.
i am a very strong indepent girl.
and i know that i am never gonna let a man treat me the way he treated my mom and Paige's mom.
and this is just one more thing i have in my life.
one more thing that will make me a stronger person down the road.

thats how i like to look at it. :)

thanks for tha feed hunn! :)
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Postby JMG » Apr 22nd, '07, 20:22

good job ;)
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Postby Enimee » Apr 23rd, '07, 01:10

Rae ur shit iz so much better then what other people put out cuz u take real life issues and make material and u do it good im like so happy to see someone with your talent putting it to use like this im serious this is great keep it up babez
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Postby Rae » Apr 23rd, '07, 01:23

thanks ... :)

ehh i try. i like this one personally. :)
but i've tried to write about stuff that i cant really relate to.
(like most artists do) and i cant. haha

but yeah thanks for the feed! :D
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