by James R. » May 4th, '07, 14:00
Just off top to mention the various / irked the fuck outta me lol
Anyways I can tell this was a while ago cuz the rhyming was all over the place. You'd have 3 lines rhymes then like 2 or 3 that didnt rhyme with anything then like 5 that rhymed then the flow would switch. It seems rushed, like a very early piece you did. What you were saying wasn't bad, not too deep, not too shallow, but the seizure-like rhyme scheme you had made it tough to follow