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Problem Child.

Postby Steve Spag » Nov 19th, '07, 21:53

This peice here actually doesn't really pertain to me a lot. I wrote this acapella for a friend. Her class is reading a book about some kid who was raised by drunks and he grew up with issues and stuff. She asked me if I could try and write something to the book so I tried this out:

His parents were drunks, he grew up a man//
Standing against 'em in raps, he ran//
Away from the issues, the wino's are wack//
He left with "I'll miss you" and never looked back//
The fights at his school didn't bother the kid//
The problem's within and it's topped with this sin//
No stoppin' the pen and no droppin' his thoughts//
He's talkin' to counsellers, they're poppin' his shots//
Straight into his skin, it's pericin' his arm//
This searin' alarm in his brain is a bomb//
About to go off, you doubters are soft//
You clown's are just frontin' and boy it's soo wrong//
And boy he's soo raw, he's breakin' the law//
Smokin' and drinkin' like Daddy and Mom//
He's punchin' the wall, he is never to fall//
He's a problem child, and his journey is long//

Again, it was written acapella so you might not get the right flow that I have in my mind for it, lol. But let me know what you think please :)
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 20th, '07, 18:57

like u sed, i had a small problem gettin da flow, but other wise the acapella had meaning,'twas deep
nice 1 man
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby J Roc » Nov 21st, '07, 22:25

i Found a Good Flow wit it, n Besides the First 2 Lines, I liked how you told a Story wit it Man :y:
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby SajN » Nov 22nd, '07, 12:00

Me too found a good flow with it.
It's a great story you got there :y:
It's very deep.
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby Steve Spag » Nov 23rd, '07, 19:22

Thanks much guys, glad you liked that peice there :worship:.
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby lostdaze18 » Nov 26th, '07, 04:01

i like the story that it tells, good job :)
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby Inzanity » Nov 26th, '07, 17:54

Away from the issues, the wino's are wack//
He left with "I'll miss you" and never looked back//



:o fucking amazing :worship: I love that line
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Re: Problem Child.

Postby Steve Spag » Nov 26th, '07, 20:20

Haha, thanks much, glad to be getting some new faces checkin' out my work here. I'll probably be posting up another peice later on tonight. I think you'll find it pretty intresting.

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