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Dry Humping

Postby Tash8 » Nov 20th, '07, 05:19

i got my kicks and hat high cause my gear is like drum kits
i'm cocking my mouth using my teeth as my gun clips
open wide bitch 'fore you bleed in my cum bits
[FUCK!]
this bitch's moanin and speakin like trumpets
then i trash her, grab her cat's feet and hump it, [oh yea]
i'm named tash-AIDS for a reason, dumb bitch

I was thinking of recording it, but i couldn't grasp a flow for it,

but i did like the multis, wordplay of it so i posted it.,
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Re: Dry Humping

Postby Tash8 » Nov 21st, '07, 16:08

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Re: Dry Humping

Postby J Roc » Nov 21st, '07, 22:07

Pretty good drop,Tash, liked that Second line, Never Seen it before so props on that :y:
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Re: Dry Humping

Postby SajN » Nov 22nd, '07, 12:04

Yeah .. it's a good drop :y:
Are you going to write more on it ?
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Re: Dry Humping

Postby Tash8 » Nov 22nd, '07, 18:30

NoN-Stop wrote:Yeah .. it's a good drop :y:
Are you going to write more on it ?


gracias, prolly not, there's not a flow i can find to fit it.
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Re: Dry Humping

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 22nd, '07, 23:39

i got my kicks and hat high
my gear is like drum kits
i'm cocking my mouth
using my teeth as my gun clips
open wide
be'fore you bleed in my cum bits
[FUCK!] this bitch's moanin and speakin like trumpets
then i trash her grab her cat's feet and hump it,
[oh yea]
i'm named tash-AIDS for a reason, haha
dumb bitch


small breath at the end of each line, pause for a second after "open wide"

gives it a "accapella flow" that should be able to get wrapped around a simple beat :sweating: i couldnt find a flow when reading so i created one then see you said you couldnt grasp a good flow so thats why i said the above lol


there good lyrics though, nice wordplay and rhymes and kool concept, good peice man :y:
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Re: Dry Humping

Postby Tash8 » Nov 24th, '07, 02:45

thanks man, and there ya go it flows now..

that's my main problem is getting an acapella flow, i usually can make a flow but it's not a good "song flow" if that makes sense :sweating:
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Re: Dry Humping

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 24th, '07, 04:07

Tash8 wrote:thanks man, and there ya go it flows now..

that's my main problem is getting an acapella flow, i usually can make a flow but it's not a good "song flow" if that makes sense :sweating:




eaisiest way is just get an accapella flow that is repetetive and if you go on lyric sites youll notice more lyrics are written like


i blah blah commission
to dah dah submission


as in most people would write it like

i blah blah commission to dah dah submission

if you break your lines up more its eisier to see were your rhymes should hit the snare and its eisier to add in more sylybles to make sure you go long enough to hit the snare, after you got that (especially since you can produce) its just wrapping the lyrics around a beat

best way to do that is to freestyle it so your not thinking about it too much, youll automatically get a rhythm that you can work on and perfect.

that just got to come with practice though, but really freestyling is probably the best way to do it, learn to be able to flow and keep on time nicely during a freestyle makes it easy as hell when your actually writing a specific flow for it :happy:
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