rise up or die

[¤°~ Jose ~¤°©]

hmm..

if i find that fear in your eyes you betta rise up or die
time to shine when you see that killer instinct inside my eyes
no matter what improvise or else feel my wrath unveil so unreal
it's deal or no deal would u face me or be a quitter n' squeal
i'll be pollutin' more than an automobile are u really a true fighter
a warrior who won't relinquish like a cigarette lighter lightin' up brighter
tighter above the rest every time u set forth no matter how intense the pain
cuz its just a weakness its all mental inside ya brain just don't complain
get fired up pumped up with blood flowin' in ya veins like hard fallin' rain

[Steve Spag]

You had some pretty cool lines in there, but it seems like there were way too many words in there. The flow was hard to find for it because of that. Keep it up.

[¤°~ Jose ~¤°©]

thanx for the feed..

yea i know i haven't wrote anything in months for that matter plus i just wanted to see if i still got it haha