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Postby Steve Spag » Nov 29th, '07, 06:16

Alright, I just decided to write to the Renegade beat a few days ago. I couldn't just stop at 16 bars so I went up to 32 for a nice verse. I personally think this is by far my best peice I've ever written, lol. The topic's are similar, but this is just more how I feel and why I do what I do, similar to him I guess, lol. Anyways, let me know what you think.

The only reason I write is to get this shit off my chest//
'Cause motherfucker's are testing me every day and I'm stressed//
They're criticising my thoughts, "what's going on in his brain?"
I'm just a failure in this life and I am searching for fame//
So you can hate me today, and you could hate me for life//
It's motivatin' this flame and it is growing soo bright//
My passion ain't at it's peak, my prime is yet to be touched//
These sluts are bringing me down and I am stuck in this rut//
So I am forced to the edge with some decision's to make//
And every move that I take is critical so I brake//
I'm in the spotlight of fans and what I do will be seen//
They're probably learning from me, and I am just an emcee//
That is expressing my feelings, for myself and none else//
I didn't mean for this to happen but I'm stuck in this drought//
And I'm attached til I die, I can not back away//
'Cause I got a reputation that I gotta maintain//
And share my views to the world and what I speak will be heard//
Over your internet, your ipod, on the streets for the birds//
This recognition is great, a needed feeling is swell//
And if it wasn't for this I'd be off rotting in hell//
This is the truth that I spit, and I'll be spitting til death//
The last words you'll hear me say will be a verse from my breath//
And when I'm burried and gone under this earth I won't rest//
I'll be spitting from the afterlife with Proof and the best//
And in the booth I don't sweat because it's easy to me//
I'm just achievin' my dream, this ain't a nightmare for me//
The nightmare that I live in is every day on this land//
I got no job, I got no money, I'm a fucked up young man//
I got some issues with whores, I got some issues with friends//
I'm just exposing my life with every drop from this pen//
Appreciate what I show 'cause one day I'll be gone//
I'm just relievin' my tension, the only point to my songs//

Leave feedback please :)
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Wallace » Nov 29th, '07, 13:22

Yep, ther's renegade flow. Nice lyrics. :y:
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Enimee » Nov 29th, '07, 14:40

BAH LYRICS COULDA BEEN BETTER IF YOU WERE GONNA DO IT TO RENEGADE BEAT I MEAN SERIOUSLY EMINEM KILLED THAT AND U JUS IDK WHAT U WAS DOIN BUT IT WAS AN ITE PEICE FO SHOW KEEP A IT
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 29th, '07, 17:29

i thought the drop was wiked steve, but i havnt heard renegade
i requested it but they gave me a rapid share link, n I dunno how the fuk ur supposed ta download frm there! :(
but all in all its was FANAN (as we say it in arabic-awesome :p )
peace
ArAbIaN ShAdY


We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


FiNd mE At dA "CREATIVE SECTION", I AM ULTIMATE INNOVATION!!
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Steve Spag » Nov 29th, '07, 17:42

Enimee wrote:BAH LYRICS COULDA BEEN BETTER IF YOU WERE GONNA DO IT TO RENEGADE BEAT I MEAN SERIOUSLY EMINEM KILLED THAT AND U JUS IDK WHAT U WAS DOIN BUT IT WAS AN ITE PEICE FO SHOW KEEP A IT


Yeah I know he killed it. As I said I was just doing this for fun, lol. But thanks for diggin' it.

Arabian Shady wrote:i thought the drop was wiked steve, but i havnt heard renegade
i requested it but they gave me a rapid share link, n I dunno how the fuk ur supposed ta download frm there!
but all in all its was FANAN (as we say it in arabic-awesome )
peace


Yeah man you gotta check that song out somehow, lol. Look it up on youtube and you'll find it for sure. But thanks for checkin' it out, I always respect your shit.

Anyone else got any feed? :)
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby SajN » Nov 29th, '07, 19:51

Nice piece man :y:
It's one of your best.
I don't know why, I couldn't get the Renegade flow on it.. :sweating:
But it's still a great verse you have there..
Simple rhymes, but effective :y:
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 29th, '07, 22:46

defiantly one of your best peices, some nice line's, good consistent rhyming (although nothing to amazing complexity wise) but still a good peice :y:

just dont record it :p coz it has eminems flow from renegade perfectly lol
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Steve Spag » Nov 29th, '07, 23:08

Thanks for the feedback guys, I appreciate it, keep it coming ;)

And yeah Bar I'm obviously not gonna record this one here, this was just for fun. Glad you seen the flow for it though on the beat, lol.
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 29th, '07, 23:58

damn good drop

tha flow was sick all throughout
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 1st, '07, 18:24

Rain Matrix wrote:damn good drop

tha flow was sick all throughout


Haha, thanks a lot man. Glad you liked it :)

Anyone else got anything?
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Re: Renegade Flow...MUST READ!

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 3rd, '07, 06:07

BUMP BUMP!
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