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Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Jay-19 » Oct 4th, '08, 15:06

Okay, a friend edited the song a little, tell me if it's okay now please. :unsure:

Recorded this song yesterday, and tried mixing it myself, but I'm worthless at it.
So I just wanted to know what you think, and give me some tips what I can mix better.

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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Jay-19 » Oct 4th, '08, 15:51

Come on, 13 views and not a single advice? :unsure:
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby KDEWolf » Oct 4th, '08, 17:26

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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Jay-19 » Oct 4th, '08, 18:42

KDEWolf wrote::unsure:


What? :unsure:
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Big Proof 4ever » Oct 4th, '08, 19:40

okai :y:
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby KDEWolf » Oct 4th, '08, 20:42

Big Proof 4ever wrote:okai :y:

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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Jay-19 » Oct 4th, '08, 20:42

Big Proof 4ever wrote:okai :y:


Thanks, but can I do something better? :confusion:
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Fa$iC » Oct 4th, '08, 21:50

Hi Killahgoat!


I listened now to the whole song and i really like it. It remember me a bit on "Life" Of Royce Tha 5´9´´ feat. Amerie.

Beat is nice, makes fun to listen to and the text is straight.

Maybe u should use yo voice a bit groovier, faster or summem, rhythm is good but u should work on ya flow a bit, its okay but could be much better ;).

For a Testversion its great :y:


Keep it up, i am afraid for the explicit version
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Jay-19 » Oct 4th, '08, 23:39

Fa$iC wrote:Hi Killahgoat!


I listened now to the whole song and i really like it. It remember me a bit on "Life" Of Royce Tha 5´9´´ feat. Amerie.

Beat is nice, makes fun to listen to and the text is straight.

Maybe u should use yo voice a bit groovier, faster or summem, rhythm is good but u should work on ya flow a bit, its okay but could be much better ;).

For a Testversion its great :y:


Keep it up, i am afraid for the explicit version


Thanks man for the feed! :flower:
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Boston » Oct 5th, '08, 13:30

the beat is straight but lets get to it
your flow isn't that bad, but sometimes it feels like your reading and some points you should put more into your delivery. the lyrics are straight, there simple, but let me know after the 'testversion' is done and ill get more in debt. lol
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Fa$iC » Oct 14th, '08, 16:35

lol np bro^^

when come the finished version out?


Boston wrote:the beat is straight but lets get to it
your flow isn't that bad, but sometimes it feels like your reading ...


when a song get record the performer got to read his rhymes he wrote down, or its a freestyle, than its different, but that´s right, it sounds to clearly that he read all that stuff^^
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Solace » Nov 29th, '08, 16:51

Flow is alright, no problems. Quality is meh, its not great but its not bad and theres nothing wrong with it. Mixing wasnt HORRIBLE, but i see that youve improved now that i check out those newer songs of yours. Your lyrics are good too, the delivery is good but i think it can be improved. I think delivery should be more improved on the chorus, cause i didnt mind the verses but the chorus was weak with that kind of delivery. Keep it up, i really liked the finished product of this (Try Not To Sleep).

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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby B.A.D. » Nov 30th, '08, 00:22

yo, sorry it takes me long time to feed, but I'm too fukn busy these dayz

but still, can u reupload the track, cuz zshare appears as page not found
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Boston » Nov 30th, '08, 00:31

Fa$iC wrote:when a song get record the performer got to read his rhymes he wrote down, or its a freestyle, than its different, but that´s right, it sounds to clearly that he read all that stuff^^



that doesn't mean its a freestyle, if you can have good delivery/emotion while reading then cool. but if you remember your lyrics it also helps you get more into it. but either way keep it up ha.
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Re: Jay-19 - Why Do Some Fall (Testversion)

Postby Xray » Nov 30th, '08, 10:09

Type of shit I would listen to when I want to chill and relax you know? So I like it man, lucky its a test version though, because you need to raise your voice a lil bit more. Sounds to whisperish you know? but with raising your voice alittle would sound alot better.

Chorus was cool to, but the mixing on it sounded bit weird though. Lyrics of the song goes well with the song, so good job man I like this track but with a few more takes and practice and better mixing would make this definitely best to go best with the concept.
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