Solace - When Will It Stop?

[Solace]

Artist: Solace
Title: When Will It Stop?
Produced By: Mister KA
Mixed By: Ice Killa
Mixtape: To Whom It May Concern...
Download Links: zShare Link |Megaupload Link
Notes: Rough track titled "The World", I use a camera to record, my 3rd track

Lyrics:
Vendettas, vices, a fight is just aggression,
Physically masked, causing kids to get arrested,
Violence, murders, influenced by the media,
More deaths than the count of words in encyclopedias,
Mothers crying, fathers leaving, people dying for no reason,
Spring, Summer, Fall to Winter, its a dying season
Kids bleeding everyday, real life is ruthless,
Things get out of hands, from smacking to shooting,
The genesis of war, started with simple arguments,
Can lead on so far, it just destroys my confidence,
Most spirits wish to live, but living just wish to die,
They live to die, many just living a lie,
See right through their eyes, translucent happiness,
Cold hearts overshadow bliss, what kind of crap is this,
I just sit down, relax and watch this world burn down,
Reminisce, just think of the shit you just learned now.

[DelinQuent]

delivery is extremely weak. you need to get into what your rapping. sound like you mean it. right now it just sounds like you're reading. if you're not into it, how is anyone else supposed to get into it?

on another side, your flow was good until this line "Kids bleeding everyday, real life is ruthless," then it was awful, before that it was good tho.

rhyming was decent. i like simple so i enjoyed the lyrics.

keep working

[Solace]

delivery is extremely weak. you need to get into what your rapping. sound like you mean it. right now it just sounds like you're reading. if you're not into it, how is anyone else supposed to get into it?

on another side, your flow was good until this line "Kids bleeding everyday, real life is ruthless," then it was awful, before that it was good tho.

rhyming was decent. i like simple so i enjoyed the lyrics.

keep working

Thanks dude

[ShAdY CaPo 08]

probably the best ive ever heard from you but yea you still got shit to get down homie... take DQ's advice..

[ThomasAguanis]

This beat's pretty sick. You don't sound that into the verse. Try to use some emotion of something, you didn't sound too confident. The flow was alright, some points were better than others, the last line was pretty off. Some parts were a bit hard to understand. I thought you said bananas at the beginning, but that could be the inner Vegan in me relating everything to fruits and vegetables. Also I heard "can of worms" instead of " the count of words." The quality of the audio needs to be clearer in my opinion, possibly the way you mixed it? The lyrics were pretty good, posting them made the song easier to follow. I'm sure you'll only improve in time.

Is that someone (possibly Peter Frampton) using a talkbox at the end of the beat?!?

[Robbie G]

First off beat was sick.

The verse still seemed to lack enthusiasm and the flow was choppy at parts. But better than before, your definably improving. lyrics were great as usual.

to whom it may concern eh..? It's funny because just the other day I was thinking and decided that if I ever wanted to try and rap I'd call an album that.

[Xray]

People saying your delivery or emotion wasn't there, I think it was, compared to your previous post it was. It's the recording equip you use that disallows us to realize the emotion or delivery. This beat is fucking amazing, damn I gotta hit KA's page soon haha. Lyrics were good, I liked them. And man the fact you didn't listen to the beat and rapped your verse and still flowed on beat is great. Big thumbs up on that. Ice Killa did a good job mixing it. This is your best track so far.

[Solace]

probably the best ive ever heard from you but yea you still got shit to get down homie... take DQ's advice..

Thanks dude, im really glad people see improvement!

This beat's pretty sick. You don't sound that into the verse. Try to use some emotion of something, you didn't sound too confident. The flow was alright, some points were better than others, the last line was pretty off. Some parts were a bit hard to understand. I thought you said bananas at the beginning, but that could be the inner Vegan in me relating everything to fruits and vegetables. Also I heard "can of worms" instead of " the count of words." The quality of the audio needs to be clearer in my opinion, possibly the way you mixed it? The lyrics were pretty good, posting them made the song easier to follow. I'm sure you'll only improve in time.

Is that someone (possibly Peter Frampton) using a talkbox at the end of the beat?!?

lmfaoooo @bananas, can of worms Thanks, and no its not the way its mixed, i dont use a mic i use a camera to record...Ill explain later if you want why i cant get a mic. Thanks for checking it. And i have no idea whos doing the talkbox, but yeah theyre saying: "Won't you believe...That everything...Is going to be alright"

First off beat was sick.

The verse still seemed to lack enthusiasm and the flow was choppy at parts. But better than before, your definably improving. lyrics were great as usual.

to whom it may concern eh..? It's funny because just the other day I was thinking and decided that if I ever wanted to try and rap I'd call an album that.

Glad no know im improving. lol and sexy minds think alike, i guess thats why

People saying your delivery or emotion wasn't there, I think it was, compared to your previous post it was. It's the recording equip you use that disallows us to realize the emotion or delivery. This beat is fucking amazing, damn I gotta hit KA's page soon haha. Lyrics were good, I liked them. And man the fact you didn't listen to the beat and rapped your verse and still flowed on beat is great. Big thumbs up on that. Ice Killa did a good job mixing it. This is your best track so far.

Thanks dude, and yeah i guess its cause of my erm.."equipment" lol. yeah hes got some sick beats And yeah props to ice killa for mixing, hes always loyal to mix whenever i ask.

[Requiem]

Thanks dude, and yeah i guess its cause of my erm.."equipment" lol. yeah hes got some sick beats And yeah props to ice killa for mixing, hes always loyal to mix whenever i ask.

no probz man, i'm always up for mixing, u know that. and yea, i can relate to the whole camera thing. my whole pre-mic was done with a camera. lol
pretty decent track man, lol, but i'm biased as hell i mixed it

[Solace]

Thanks dude, and yeah i guess its cause of my erm.."equipment" lol. yeah hes got some sick beats And yeah props to ice killa for mixing, hes always loyal to mix whenever i ask.

no propz man, i'm always up for mixing, u know that. and yea, i can relate to the whole camera thing. my whole pre-mic was done with a camera. lol
pretty decent track man, lol, but i'm biased as hell i mixed it

thanks dude

[Requiem]

Thanks dude, and yeah i guess its cause of my erm.."equipment" lol. yeah hes got some sick beats And yeah props to ice killa for mixing, hes always loyal to mix whenever i ask.

no propz man, i'm always up for mixing, u know that. and yea, i can relate to the whole camera thing. my whole pre-mic was done with a camera. lol
pretty decent track man, lol, but i'm biased as hell i mixed it

thanks dude

oops, i just noticed i said "no propz" ha ha. meant to say "no probz"
*off to edit*

[Solace]

Okay guys I know I suck and all but I need your feedback to understand how to improve...Seriously all ive gotten so far was "improve delivery", "get a mic" and "pronounce better"...Well first off, how do i improve delivery?

[Robbie G]

how do i improve delivery?

Use FEDEX.

really though I was reading this, not sure if it's helpfull though.

http://www.thestateofhiphop.com/rap-advice-1.html

[TRUPAIN]

2 BE HONEST I LIKE THE LYRICS BUT THE THEIR WANO FEELING IN HOW YOU SPIT IT OUT.DELIVERY NEEDS WORK 4REAL.KEEP DOING YOUR THING FOLK.PRACTICE MAKES PERFECT.

[Solace]

how do i improve delivery?

Use FEDEX.

really though I was reading this, not sure if it's helpfull though.

http://www.thestateofhiphop.com/rap-advice-1.html

lmao, i seen that site but it didnt really help. Thanks for trying tho

@Trupain, i thank you for checking it out and i hope ill improve delivery....I still got a lot of years to do it so i aint in no rush. Im only 13 after all